|Reviews for The Eye|
| Eristarisis chapter 1 . 8/15/2008
You've got sound reasoning for the names you picked which is always good - shows research and also the fact that there is a plan behind the writing of this. I must admit that the first chapter, as an openner while a tad bit short, does an excellent job of hooking the reader as you refer to the past (anti-werewolf movement) and how its going to impact the future (JOhn Lupin's child(ren)).
However, one minor thing I'd like to point out is that repetition in description can make sentences difficult to read - you use the phrase "dark blood" in the third paragraph two or three times... vary your description, especially when describing the same thing/feature to avoid boring your readers, especially in opening chapters. If you loose a reader during an opening chapter, odds are, you won't get much in the way of follow through on the rest of the fic.
| AudreyLovesRemus chapter 1 . 3/17/2008
I like it, Harry. I definitely like it. You know how fond I am of dear Remus. It's fabulous, I can't wait for the next update.