Reviews for World on Fire
CAPTAINPRICE79 chapter 13 . 7/28
Let's start a riot, a riot! Let's start a riot!
CAPTAINPRICE79 chapter 7 . 7/28
Brenda should give the flyer for Viagra to Smith as a present. See what happens.
Ciekawa Osoba chapter 15 . 4/26
Aww, the two working through their emotional constipation! :3
An aside - Davis finding out Vahan Mewtwo sure as hell didn't sink in on-screen, did it? Because once she does, there'll be screamin'.
I liked Mewtwo's rampage - and Brenda's reaction to it [seeing the extent of his power] even more! Glowing blue eyes now shut her up. I wonder how long that's gonna last...
I hope you read these reviews, still. Maybe?
All the little psychological and physiological bits about Mewtwo, I love how much thought and analysis you put into his character!
darrelodin chapter 15 . 9/28/2013
Well, besides the couple of grammatical errors, awesome story once more! The relationships continued very well, some little secrets were finally put out, and nobody important died!
RandomReader chapter 11 . 9/10/2013
You're WHAT? Aww, man! Well, good job on the chapter anyway.
RandomNameReader chapter 2 . 9/8/2013
Wow. In no other story have I seen anyone work the fact that Mewtwo is 6' 7" tall into their fanfiction. Good job, Kayauri-n.:]
Dragxon chapter 5 . 6/12/2013
blue dye for vahan. no. reflective green dye. YES!
Guest chapter 15 . 7/14/2012
BrenTwo shipping O

MewDa? XD anyway awesome stuff.
Aronim chapter 15 . 6/30/2012
This is really a lot of fun to read. One more thing though, the riot just seems to happen for no particular reason. Is it on purpose or was it a mistake that you didn't really explain why it happened?
Aronim chapter 11 . 6/30/2012
One thing in: In this chapter you imply (or outright state) several times that Mewtwo doesn't have claws, while later in Chosen Fate, when Brenda wakes Mewtwo up from his nightmare, he seems to have claws, the sentence goes something like "since when did Mewtwo have claws anyway?" Is that an oversight or continuity error or is Mewtwo unaware that he has claws until that time when he attacks Brenda?

One other thing, did Davis miss the "non-hacker"-comment Brenda made in the meeting she was in or was that comment one more thing that set into motion the events that let to this collapse in their cooperation?

Great dramatic chapter.
Aronim chapter 2 . 6/30/2012
The furniture shopping is absolutely hilarious.
Silvar Sunstrider chapter 15 . 9/26/2009
GREAT STORY! Just finished the whole thing, and its HILARIUS!And I love the parts where Mewtwo goes boom. Nice one!

-Silvar
Kyuuketsuki Fang chapter 15 . 7/30/2009
Love how you make Brenda so disagreeable. There are too many stories where the main character is friendly and nice to everyone. It adds character!
Williamguest chapter 15 . 5/10/2009
IM still reading your stories, I like them so much I read thru the night.
dr.evil99 chapter 8 . 4/4/2009
I don't think that I've ever seen Brenda this worried before. We're used to seeing her angry (her default mode), and we've even seen her concerned, but it's clear that these crime scenes are getting to her. She can't help but link the appearances of the victims to Alison. It seems like this is a downside of being a good cop... you're never really off the job.

And speaking of the crime scenes, you're really doing a good job of spelling out the details here. I think this as vivid as I've ever seen your work get. The level of description here really hammers home the horrors of what's going on here. When I read these, I really don't feel like I'm reading something in the Pokemon universe... this is far more gritty. Some Pokemon fans may gripe about this, I suppose, but I really like this.

About the only thing I can say I'd like to see some of is that I'd like to see some of Mewtwo's perspective here. I'm really wondering how he's dealing with this... this is perhaps the most horrible crime he's had to face. Even thought the victims are not his species, I think that this still has to affect him. If it's getting to Brenda, a far more seasoned cop than him, I can't see how it couldn't.

Overall, I continue to be very impressed. A lot of mystery type stories seem to move slowly just out of the meticulous construction they require, but this seems to be very brisk. I never feel like you're slowing the pace down to just dump info or clues to the reader, a fact that I very much appreciate. Great work, as always.
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