|Reviews for Failure to Breathe|
| Agnese Potter chapter 1 . 3/13/2008
I prefer this re-write (even if the other one isn't bad, I loved the rythm in that one too.. :D) because it feels more "complete". Plus there are some great lines/pharagraphs.
Snapping your mouth back shut and grunting in one hasty male-Uchiha-dignity-saving-move, your perfect black Uchiha eyes dart anxiously from side-to-side, to make sure no one has witnessed your momentary slip-up from acceptable Uchiha-perfection-and with your perfectly mastered (Uchiha) glare, of course, just to make sure they keep quiet about it if they have.
| ArgyBargy chapter 1 . 3/11/2008
Great stuff! :D
I think this is much improved from 'Gagging, Spitting, Still Breath Failing' It seems less of an idea and more of a story, if you get what I mean. Please do. ;;
| ironicpanda chapter 1 . 3/11/2008
who. It's Lifeasacloud off LJ. I have an account. Go me. So, I loved this. Loved the tension and the daisy and it was just all around tasty.