|Reviews for Unforgiven|
| afickleflakes chapter 7 . 1/28/2012
this was so good. ;A;
| Dimminished chapter 7 . 11/11/2008
:( That was sad. Gosh... who to feel worse for? Sam for being left behind, or Dean for leaving his brother behind?
I enjoyed that Sam voiced his true feelings aloud, even though hearing the admission hurt Dean.
One thing I loved about this chapter is how brilliantly you made clear that revenge is never the answer, and no matter how good revenge feels, it really doesn't make situations any better.
This was a wonderfully thought out story, which was very well written, as usual.
It's been a pleasure. Thank-you! :)
| Dimminished chapter 6 . 11/11/2008
Huh? A new twist.
I give you loads of credit for the research. Of course as far as I'm concerned you could have completely made up the thing and I'd have believed every word of it.
Knowing the legend actually does exists adds a lot to the story though, so once again... lots of credit goes out to you for taking the time to find all this out.
The humor we're treated to through out this story is very appreciated. I laughed out loud when Sam's frustration with Deans boot dilemma had Sam wanting to throw Dean back in the water so they'd match. Hehehe... I loved that!
| Dimminished chapter 5 . 11/11/2008
LOL, how the two of them manage to joke around after narrowly escaping that water creature is almost more of a mystery than the actual, and might I add WONDERFULLY written, mystery you've got going here.
I'm glad Sam was able to get Deans boot back for him, but when he first found the stick to try I was thinking... oh no... here we go again. :)
Now I must go back to the very first couple sentences of this chapter and point out how endearing it was that Sam was outside anxious over Dean's return to the cabin... so so cute. It reminded me of something a little kid would do and I could completely see Sam doing that for real.
I have to give Sam a lot of credit though... he's saved Deans life twice now. Oh, and when Dean was complaining about the shape of his waterlogged boot and Sam told him he'd much rather have him in one piece *sighs* It was a small moment packed with huge emotion.
And I'm with Dean... Just what the hell was that thing?
Can't wait to find out. :)
| Dimminished chapter 4 . 11/10/2008
:) I completely adored this cozy cabin scene you've so nicely treated us to.
Sam's nursing skills were both amusing and sweet, as was Dean's reactions.
I have a feeling you're giving us a little breather before you put us through another hellishly tense chappie.
Can't wait to find out what Sam finds so interesting.
This story is amazing. :)
| Dimminished chapter 3 . 11/10/2008
Well... that was rather tense. *tries to get heartbeat regulated*
Actually, I like tense moments and lucky for me this chapter was full of them. First I was afraid something was gonna jump out at them in the cabin and even though I was half expecting it, I think I may have actually jumped somewhat when the thing in the water pulled Dean under.
Luckily, Sam didn't give up and was successful in getting Dean out. A close one for sure.
Now I've got to rush on to the next chapter to see what's going on... cu there.
| Dimminished chapter 2 . 11/10/2008
Oh, this is getting good. Whatever's in the water sounds menacing and creepy. I think the most frightening aspect of the unknown creature is that it appears capable of thinking... never a good thing when it comes to monsters.
Hehe... Dean in the forest is just as I imagined... poor Sam. lol
Speaking of poor Sam, the library scene was hilarious. I laughed out loud at the thought of Sam ready to hand 'bored out of his mind' Dean a pencil when it appeared Dean wanted to poke himself in the eye. Funny stuff. :D
See ya next chappie...
| Dimminished chapter 1 . 11/10/2008
Okay, aside from my excitement over the job they're heading to (Dean in the forest sounds like all kinds of fun, lol), I love the easy banter and kidding around between the brothers.
I mean, yeah the whole Deal thing is still hanging over their heads in this story, but their childish antics at the diner made me completely forget about it and left me feeling very happy by the end of this chapter.
Oh... and the way Dean kept an eye on Sam while he was calling Bobby... adorable. :)
Can't wait to continue.
| Zadrak chapter 7 . 8/5/2008
Brilliant story - fast pace, interesting, humour, hurt!dean, linked in to previous eps... what more could you want in a story?
Keep up the great work
| Zadrak chapter 5 . 8/5/2008
BWHAHA! thats the best chapter in the history of ever.
"You lost your shoe." Fantastic!
| staceycj chapter 7 . 6/26/2008
Hello! *waves* me again! So, I printed this last night, by the way it was uber long, made me happy! Anyway, took me all day to read, but it was another very good one! I like how you do hunts. I invariably screw them up when I write them but you do it supurbly. I was very amused with the whole Dean and boot issue, that is so Dean. And I noted that one of your A/Ns stated that people mentioned that it read like an episode. It did. I could hear Dean loud and clear in my head. Awesome job!
| pandora jazz chapter 7 . 4/13/2008
I want to apologize for not sticking with your story. I should have just continued reading, as once again you did an excellent job of capturing the brothers voices and giving us some great brother moments.
You mentioned that you didn't have any issues with this season and I'm sorry I let mine cloud the beginning of your story. I should have just worked through it, because you are one the authors I can always trust.
When I started reading again in chapter three, I liked the brothers conversation as they walked through the woods and the simple moment of Dean warning Sam about the rotten wood as they entered the house.
An intense scene as Sam tried to rescue Dean from the creature. I had to smile later as Dean reacted to the news it was similiar to a turtle. " ...You're seriously telling me that we're dealing with a Mutant Ninja Turtle."
Nice brother moment as Sam patched Dean up after the initial attack, '...Dean had actually preferred his brother to patch him up rather than John...'
I could just hear Bobby's voice as he responded to the news about Dean's first fight with the creature. "That only an idiot actually leans over the water when he thinks there's something in it." I also loved how Bobby worried about Dean. I have always wondered how Bobby knows where to look when he is searching for a book.
Poor Dean, the kappa almost drowns him and than ruins his boot.
Of course getting rid of the kappa couldn't be easy. Nice twist having Mr. Miyagi appear during the ritual.
I liked the ending, though Sam's lines, 'And as for what I’m gonna be like when you’re gone, well I’m afraid you don’t get a say in that. Cos you’re not gonna be here to see it. I’m sorry.' We have an idea of a possible future after watching "Mystery Spot."
You wrote a nice tie in to "Fresh Blood", as Dean commented on the Impala.
Sam's thoughts at the end, echo alot of our wishes, as long as he doesn't do something stupid. 'Whether Dean liked it or not, Sam was going to find a way out of this deal for him.' Hopefully the brothers together can find a way to break the deal.
Thanks for sharing another story with us.
Until next time, take care.
| Kelcor chapter 7 . 4/11/2008
Very well done! I have to agree with the other reviews, it did read quite a bit like an actual episode. :o) And you have the Sam and Dean's banter down to a tee! Congrats! :o)
| buffgirl73 chapter 7 . 3/26/2008
Wow, I've actually become a bit review shy over the past year or so, but this definitely merits one! I really enjoyed it, and it does read like a proper episode, you've got the personalities down to pat, thanks for a great read.
| bhoney chapter 7 . 3/24/2008
Wow, really well done! Lots of good things to say about this story. You did a great job with it, it really was like an episode-suspense, humor, brotherly interaction. You really captured their voices well, and I love the fact that you used a real mythological creature (a conundrum, I know :) ).
You did a great job setting the scene too. I totally got a chill when I realized their cell phones didn't work, and your description of the house in the woods was really creepy.
You do like drowning Dean, don't you? First you try to drown him in Meditation and Murder, now here...shame on you! You're going to give the boy a phobia! :)
Loved the injection of snarky humor throughout: "Dean was about ready to stab himself in the eye with a pencil, just for something to do, and Sam was about ready to hand it to him." LOL!
Also, you did a really good job of laying the foundation for what happened in Fresh Blood and Mystery Spot, particularly. Elegantly done!
I really hope you're hard at work on more fic for us. I love these longer, episodic stories-you do them so well.
See, I'm getting better about leaving comments. You'll be begging me to shut up soon. ;)