Reviews for First Time
crystalblue19 chapter 1 . 5/20/2016
That was so beautiful and sweet! x3
satomika chapter 1 . 10/16/2015
I love how explicit and poetic this fic rolls!


ditchmydismay chapter 1 . 2/27/2013
Your story is very breath-taking :) it is truly wonderful ...
kandita chapter 1 . 10/23/2012
Very good...wish it was a bit longer
jessica-semnadaprafaze123 chapter 1 . 8/30/2012
omg i love it!
APSH chapter 1 . 7/31/2012
nicely written!
TheresaRayne chapter 1 . 7/15/2010
Loved it! It was beautifully written...

Nikerdoodle chapter 1 . 8/12/2009
That was probably the sweetest lemon i've ever read . :)

your fics are wonderful :)
math music reading chapter 1 . 8/1/2009
That was beautiful. The depth of their love was tangible.
A Dreamer Always chapter 1 . 6/5/2009
Dear God . . .

I am jealous of your skill. And yet proud to be part of this intelligent group of writers XD I know, I'm a sick minded person. I was reading romance novels at a young age, mind you XD
AReyes chapter 1 . 4/9/2009
*Nosebleeds* th-this is your first lemon? *shakes head* how dare you say it's not good enough! YOUR AMAZING! *sighs* its so far the BEST sasuhina lemon I ever seen! *hands you 1# trophy.
ACCOUNT INCINERATED chapter 1 . 1/21/2009
Are you SURE this is your first time writing lemon? It's so great. I looks you've had experience.
a pretty little stranger chapter 1 . 5/18/2008
I have read a lot of sex scenes (boy, that sounds bad, doesn't it?), but this...

This is the most elegantly and beautifully written scene that I have ever read in my life. Spectacular job, dear.
Shikamarufan468 chapter 1 . 5/9/2008
Ok, that was incredibly good, but, there has to be more of a build up to it. You have to tell about how they started getting "into it". Plus, I'm not trying to be mean, considering that this is your first lemon scene, but you should actually tell us what's going on, cause one minute, he's up top' the next, he's got himself all up in there. You should stick to writing about Hinata! Try it with Shikamaru (HinaShik). Overall, it was pretty damn good!
july's winter chapter 1 . 4/17/2008
Smoldering hot. Very well written (and decent in the true sense of the word) for a lemon. You have an admirable skill of using metaphors. Fave!
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