Reviews for Misadventured Overthrows
Sunflare2k5 chapter 14 . 12/31/2009
"He merely nods. 'I once thought, you being an intelligent but immature young man, you built yourself a refillable, mechanical bracelet-like device to shoot synthetic spiderwebs out. Oh well.'"

*grins* The organic webbing bit was one of the things I thought was wrong with movieverse-Spidey. The webs became merely another bit of luck, rather than a chance to showcase Peter's intellect.
Sunflare2k5 chapter 10 . 12/30/2009
Dear Spidey,

If Doc Ock can steal your girlfriend so easily, may I suggest you just give up on having a life? You're obviously not suited for the task. :)
Radio Driver chapter 15 . 4/22/2008
Great story, Trick. Keep on keepin on.
Song With No Soul chapter 15 . 4/19/2008
"... But in the end, it doesn't even matter..." Once again, nice choice of song.

Lesser men, yes. But not him, of course. NEVER him. What a waste that would be! He's learned his lesson.

I can't even get mad at Otto for doing that to Osborn. I'm not exactly fond of him (Osborn) myself. And it's right in line with the character you've written him as. By now, all I can do is shake my head and think, 'Oh, that Otto.'

OhmyFSM, THAT is a Helluva twist. I wonder whose it is... and what happens when the dust clears... Austin?

Overall: Pretty good, the twist you promised certainly was there... oh wow, are you going to follow this up or are you going to leave us hanging? I have a few beefs, though: firstly, Aunt May's comment about being "lied to constantly" doesn't seem like anything somebody would actually say in casual conversation. Secondly, the end where MJ comes in seems sudden and sort of random, like she just suddenly appears. I did catch the intro sentence, but it just doesn't seem like proper buildup. If she comes suddenly in, then it should at least be noted that she came in suddenly, instead of stating it all matter-of-factly: oh, she's here.

But don't let that think that means that I didn't like it. I did. You did a great job! I can't wait until the new stuff you hinted at comes out.
Song With No Soul chapter 14 . 4/18/2008
Ooh, I can't wait, then!

Thanks for the heads up, Master Planner. I would've been pretty confused.

I think it's cute that Pete still (ironically) calls him Uncle Otto.

Rossalyn Island is going to blow up. Keeping her safe for THAT reason isn't important anymore.

Aha, twist. It did make a good first impression on me, skim-reading nonwithstanding. Finally, the truth will come out. Even though he's probably going to be okay, I keep on getting that same feeling when Uncle Otto's going to get the glider that I get when watching him down the subsun in Spider-Man 2, like he's going to do something he knows he won't survive.
Song With No Soul chapter 13 . 4/13/2008
Why thank you. I wish everyone had such opinions on freedom of religion...

Alfred Molina PLAYED Snidely Whiplash in a live-action Dudley Do-Right movie, actually.

I know. Apparently, she wasn't even aware she was kidnapped.

"... not to mention my rightful property..." Yeah, right, Otto.

Galileo would be flattered, I'm sure.

Called it. He probably WAS "pickled up to his ears" to forget Otto's threats. (BTW, I like that phrase. It's funny.)

Took long enough, Aunt May.

Uh oh. Bye bye Normie. Nice to know ya. (Or am I being optimistic?) And bye bye Rosalyn Island.

It's nice to see that Otto actually cares about Aunt May. He doesn't about Pete and the others, but that would be too much to ask.

Overall: This climax wasn't exactly climaxy (it didn't exactly get me on the edge of my seat, which was disappointing, because you're normally good at that) but it was a good chapter on its own. Right on par with the rest of it. I want to see what happens next. I'm sure that you'll throw me for a loop or two.
Song With No Soul chapter 12 . 4/11/2008
First of all, nice choice of song! I love that song too.

Ah yes, I was afraid that censorship may have been involved. That's really unfortunate.

The FSM thing was really random. It's supposed to replace the word "God". It stands for Flying Spaghetti Monster. I'm Pastafarian.

You tell it like it is, Pete. I know a guy who had the file cut off of his nail clippers at the border but was allowed to bring two fully assembled scooters across with no problem.

Mountie? You know we actually have real police up here, right?

I'm surprised at how suave this kidnapping operation is. You normally can't hope to be treated that nicely when you get taken hostage. Of course, this is The Marvel Universe According to The Trickster, so it's quite an interesting place there.

Ooh, Pete. Good thing Otto's here to save your butt. Right in front of Aunt May too.

Overall: Good. Not great, but good. Realistic (except for maybe the mountie thing) and fairly IC, and I still want to see what's coming next.
Radio Driver chapter 11 . 4/10/2008
Great story, Trick. Keep on keepin on.
Song With No Soul chapter 11 . 4/6/2008
Okay, here it comes... *Braces self*

I like how he describes us as "otherwise sane and normal young ladies". It's awfully kind of him, considering I myself have my serious doubts...

Wow, that wasn't even that bad. Thank FSM Otto has *some* standards. But I bet that he also knows that the kind of people who'd read his blag wouldn't have much trouble filling in the details themselves... I'm trying hard not to do that.

"Horizantal gymnastics". I'd make a joke about that phrase, but then I'd have to contemplate what they were doing...

Poor Aunt May. I wonder what they did to get her to sign away the nuclear reactor. Thank goodness Otto's a tough guy to mess with. Good luck, man.

Now, the action's finally picking up! And not in the sense that Otto was getting from BC, either. Thank goodness. Is that due to the censorship on the part of the FFN people? Now, we're getting somewhere, and I can't wait to see where. Knock 'em down, drag 'em out time!
Song With No Soul chapter 10 . 4/4/2008
Character-driven is good. Makes the stories interesting. You definitely do that well.

Don't worry about writing to please ANYBODY but yourself, Trickster. That just takes the fun out of it.

And all the people on the train! Don't forget the people on the train!

Ha, real mature Otto, hacking AND fake Viagra. I thought that would be beneath you. Mark him as spam, Pete.

I like how he calls him Uncle Otto. He's so bitter about it, I can feel it through the computer screen.

Riding on the subway! That's classic Peter Parker luck. I'd love to have been on the subway, if for no other reason than for the comedic value.

...ohmanmentalimages. In HIS bed, too!

...So, what about that superpowered thug in the swimming pool?

You're right, that wasn't boring, although the plot still isn't advancing very fast. But most of the "not boring" was at the very end, and I think that's as much as I can handle until I digest the idea. I assume that's something I can look forward to in the next chapter.
dococtavius04 chapter 10 . 4/2/2008
O.o So Cat and Ock were...

Oh my god...that's a scary thought. _

I'm loving this story so far... if only I could write like this!
Song With No Soul chapter 9 . 3/31/2008
Right, sorry. Black Cat's comment. Anything Otto might have said in response to that is 100% justified. Yes, we'd better HOPE. Thanks. I think that the thing is that most people haven't realized that you started writing again.

Thanks, Otto. I have an ego, I just don't impose it on everything that breathes. At least you aren't afraid to voice your opinions. But has it ever occurred to you that you might be a bit... bitter?

I'm actually quite impressed by how he handled the situation with the Scorpion busting in. Impressed, but not surprised. Being completely unflappable is his specialty. Old Mac is in way over his head if he thinks he can take Otto Octavius.

Well, that explains why she was sitting in his lap. Oh, Pete, I don't think she's YOUR girlfriend anymore.

Otto's description of Peter as he comes in makes me laugh. You could just tell that whatever he just did, it wasn't fun.


Well written, with Otto and Pete in character (maybe Tobey Maguire wouldn't give anybody the one-fingered victory salute, but a pissed off Pete sure would.) Otto was perfect. This chapter also went a long way to explain the events of last chapter. However, I am noticing one thing: over the last several chapters, not much has happened. This seems a bit of a waste. Is the action going to pick up soon?
Song With No Soul chapter 8 . 3/30/2008
“Hey, when you can shoot a hundred thousand volts of electric death from your fingers, who's gonna talk smack about your outfit?” Didn't you answer your own question?

Seriously Spidey, I hope that there were no PEOPLE in that bus...

"Doctor Octopus elopes with my aunt because he really has the hots for her uranium mine?" Wow, that does actually prettymuch sum it up, doesn't it?

Ha, I like how Pete keeps on saying that things could be worse and then he comes home to see his girlfriend sitting on his enemy's lap,(what was she doing there, anyway? I thought she hated him,) eating his food and watching his tv. It just really emphasizes that, not only CAN his life get worse, but it will, steadily.

Yeah, Pete, things just did get worse.

Nice, once again. The emphasis in this chapter was clearly on how much Peter's life sucks, and the slow buildup of sucky things to the climax of Otto's threat did well to convey this. I feel a little bad for him, but the way he said is too damn funny to really get me to jump on the "life sucks" bandwagon. But yes, this is quintessential Peter Parker luck.
Song With No Soul chapter 7 . 3/29/2008
First off, nice chapter title. Especially considering it's written in Otto's voice.

Yeah Pete! You're supposed to be a genius or something! "IF he stays alive long enough." Something tells me he won't. Otto doesn't like any loose ends, does he?

Nice soliloquy, Otto. Very profound, as you doubtlessly intended to impress upon the web-surfing masses.

Oh my, vital organs. After reading Otto's response to that comment, (which was just a little RUDE,) I'm not so surprised that he took his fangirl population in stride. There are far too many things on the internet mentioning his vital organs.

Addlepated. Nice use of vocabulary to both of you. A less refined man would've just sworn.

I love how Otto immediately breaks out the junk food. Whatever, just so long as it helps with the pain.

Overall: Well-written, interesting to see Otto's take on things, as always. Dialogue not exactly the same, but different people live life differently, so it's fine. It's a bit weird that Otto doesn't call the actuators actuators, since he named them that in the first place.
Song With No Soul chapter 6 . 3/28/2008
Wow, no kidding. Las Vegas sounds like a different planet. Year One and Boy Genius FTW! Yeah, this guy probably will be on Jerry Springer and all of those shows telling his story: When I Married Doctor Octopus. (The more misleading the tagline, the better!)

Okay. I'm just going to STOP pointing out all of the times Pete endangers his identity with this blag of his. It's wasting too much time.

It must be pretty surreal for Pete to have his archenemy/uncle sitting there in his house fixing one of the actuators that he's tried to murder Pete with countless times.

Hmm, now for the team-up. I did see this coming, but now I know things are definitely going to get more interesting from here. I can't wait!
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