|Reviews for What happened after the wedding|
| Rachel chapter 1 . 7/17/2014
There are some errors here.
1. I don't know who's talking, it's just dialogue.
2. Holly and Val's mom is dead, she she can't possibly walk in on them unless it's in spiritual form (which would be a whole other story).
3. Why is having a baby such a bad thing?
4. Is it Vince's baby? I'm confused because there is absolutely NOTHING besides dialogue.
5. Grammatical errors.
I can only hope you're a better writer, being that it is six years later.
| Not Saying chapter 1 . 7/29/2009
that's all i have to say.
| xXMidnightEssenceXx chapter 2 . 7/9/2009
Val and Holly's mother is dead
Lauren says sething about that in episode "Someone's In the Kitchen With Daddy"
| xXMidnightEssenceXx chapter 1 . 7/9/2009
Um I'm not following this...
| XxCrimsonTearsxX chapter 4 . 2/7/2009
May I suggest a beta to edit your writing? Or at least fix up the grammar mistakes... The first few chapters were confusing because of poor grammar. You could fix up the plot line a little more, add more supporting sentences so not everything is spoken.
Just trying to help.
| MeganMelodramatic chapter 4 . 9/12/2008
| Ashley chapter 1 . 6/22/2008
Wow, Ok I know im only 11 but I love what i like about you ive been watching the show since 2003. Grate reiview by the way!
| Daisy190 chapter 4 . 6/22/2008
update soon )
| ichirukipwns chapter 1 . 4/30/2008
um...u mean vic not vince right?
| VInceholly chapter 2 . 4/1/2008
it sorta confusion the set up
| abby chapter 3 . 3/23/2008
no you cant stop here! conyinue!