Reviews for The Jewel
Debbie Hicks chapter 20 . 3/10/2016
Atomic Weapon ALERT
That RATTLESNAKES Took my Blood from me but suddenly Attacked bUT vOLTURI HEARD TIS OF MY OWN POWRS BUT crrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrc unched very too AS ALL OF TRILLIONS BUT drained oF BLOOD! aS aLL OF IT screamed bUT sNapped freely tIME-rIPPED BUT Wit evelven more gather more than our newes blood Snapped of our trues memories lost forever ten taken from us/them my mother was so sick with dad suddenly with myself were too frail but te Carnivorous selves EXPLODED! With my own had my blood all of te sudden faded as all of it DESTROYED! But myself Was paler without lor so they but it was already too late bot parents each died of each other myself survived te blades shattered into a Lip Rod ten it floated I knew te words BETAZED CRYSTAL POWER MAKE-UP! I Suddenly Blasted who suddenly Ascended as a Sailor Soldier a protector of the two world but crashing but blackd out coldly but Shattered but never sighten te bodies Again but suddenly my blood was different very ifftent instad of both was one sword my magical sword but they returned Masters Isabella is a Sailor Guardian but she has a daughter had her with tem punished but is unable to have more children drained of halves of her blood is a lethal Assassin traind for combat is a Vampire slaying Sailor Soldier of the planet Betazed guads the great fire is not allowed to attend school tey are officially sentenced to death make it truthful but official that Alie had a Vision so more powerful gasped but SMAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASH! Alice what do seen and g heard Volturi tey are coming for her of her gift are as all of them tey decree a sentence of death but tey killed them but had our corpses murdered we need witnesses for her with tem had kids aged to adulthood but CRUNCHED! Wit te witnesses without bodies taken fromhere then was no more them it was already too late killed for my blood releaed more of them Alie I testd her but my needle snapped she is a Vampire sailor soldier your eyes are Red oh my Hades what happened you died of a flu but a painful fiery side affect your host shocked you to life but you have Vampirism so are you care to hunt gladly to rebuild my bood supply I am in that in te few days and nights was sleepless of te destroyed but blended host so teirs gained golden/b;ack eyes shattered to yellow but it really got very too wrong I could have prophetic dreams could sense danger Crashed from our own unification of corpses but vanished but landed with one hugest but more piercing hole but very too more biggest into teir lab dead officially ripped more than trillions bittenWit poison but too late exploded bursting te holes very way too mu many oerextremely as all of it popped from life to Death officially it is omplete tey are dea Masters tHat murdered But killed forevr sent a e-mail of our corpses's pictures Friends you broken this as all rules these corpses are drained of te remaining blood took aay te blood she once hold by orders of our Assassins yu and ey are extinct forever from your extistance are severed from here are cursed with Death suffer bitter immortality but tey are buried with as all of them but served us more but exploded you are unable to leave Volturi that was it the seer felt me cold as ice was unable to die at all but wit her our daughter with our grandchildren so they were oh my god t they did this to us/them but look te World changed we are unable to age we need more allies that found Witches taught Dawn Read Spier and myself some witchcraft but preformed a sacred holiest ritual learned causing me to feel magic dressed from Krull looked with Ocampan pointed ears wit my hair Parted wearing a crown Kate I am a little rusty but I am a stinkin' Elvish woman I swore in Gaelic was from ancient Scotland with magic oh my god you have it from your heritage nice ears very funny going to lead a Syrannite fight what name I am T'Lar it's time begin the ritual I Said the Ancient dialects of the Vulcans a Sharpest ringing sound but suddenly Myself was a Mental shield suddenly felt my channeling magic began to pray using graceful movement but silently closed my own eyes began to enter a Jedi battle meditation created a Far more Thunderous but more psionic mind storm of the soul entered a a trance sucessfully preformed the Fal Tor Pan onto William Black with a Wizard acted like The Vulcan high priestess T'Lar of all of the planet Vulcan my White red robes my crown was onto my head wearing a Vestment kept my hair longer far more longer expanded but suddenly had Greek styled bangs swirled sides I was a seasoned priestess was a ceremonial female priest held Authority rights and titles and ranks ascended as a Acolyte but my powers evolved but changed us/them who have gifts but I was dressed to look iike a Vulcan priestess so her with them wre so religious followed Surak's teachings life work but became Syrannites followed from their leadr and teacher my robes wi eir robs moved but it really happened forged Telekniesis ourselves were celibate trained to be holiest but more spiritual Vulcan women causing us/te women to chant really devout and religious Vulcan words and dialects I was fluent in Vulcan looked like a Adult Vulcan woman but I was young could not tell how old really I am but I looked like a Extraterrestrial from a world was harsh ot but hostile but myself was a Acolyte of Mount Seleya of Gol was on Vulcan was three times stronger greater than normal like a Vulcan female but myself was too strong but was wiry for combat fit like a Sehlat leaner as a Le-Matya caused me to look in my early twenities or more kept my darker golden brown eyes Onyx was not normal looked from their planet.
Motherof8 chapter 7 . 2/28/2016
Good chapter
Motherof8 chapter 2 . 2/28/2016
That was good
Motherof8 chapter 1 . 2/28/2016
Sounds good
sv chapter 20 . 9/29/2015
I love the new Bella and the vitalis line u have created..
angelari7 chapter 3 . 9/22/2015
this is kinda good. More than some I read recently.
angelari7 chapter 1 . 9/22/2015
The first chapter was alright let's see what happens next.
Guest chapter 20 . 7/3/2015
nice and beautiful story! :)))
hi chapter 20 . 9/12/2014
Write more of these type! THERE GUD!
jess.sree chapter 7 . 3/10/2014
I can't stand it anymore. I'm sorry, but this isn't my cup of tea. I tried, though. I got through 7 chapters, didn't I? I just didn't like how fast this is going. I liked how you gave the initial depth to Bella-like family background and mythical history, but didn't like how you didn't factor that into Bella's personality and social interactions. There is a sort of disconnection between the strong/killer/assassin!Bella vs. clumsy/googoo-eyed!Bella. It's very disconcerting how she can trust the Cullens-especially Edward-so easily after everything that she had gone through. It doesn't make sense! Then again, I don't know your circumstances; maybe you intended it to be THIS FAST-PACED. I personally, no offense to you, prefer a slow, gradual and logical build up of the romance. I think characterization is very important, so I paid attention to that the most. Thank you though, for the read; it was good while I could last.
Guest chapter 3 . 7/28/2013
So he's a hunter you have to be more clear
MinnieMatthews chapter 20 . 5/16/2013
Let me say it again cheesy
MinnieMatthews chapter 14 . 5/16/2013
One word for u cheesy
Guest chapter 10 . 4/28/2013
I was hoping bells would sing fighter
Simply Dorelle chapter 8 . 2/24/2013
Great story, you have an amazing talent which I wish more FanFiction users possessed. Please continue writing!
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