|Reviews for Halo: Clone Wars|
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/25
So... I reread the chapter and cried. I cries at how badly written this was. Not badly written in terms of grammar and punctuation but plot. You took a good idea and murdered if then revived it with a mixture of even worse ideas making a chimera that surpasses the horribleness of Frankenstien. I gained a migraine from how much I tried to make sense of what you wrote. However I will admit that you must receive something writing as much as you did and maintaining less grammar and punctuation errors then other beginning fanfics.
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/25
You said not to flame you but really it's all I can do. This is horrible... Seriously already thought of ways to improve the story just for more logical sense. It's a joke... A better story then a lot of other beginning fanfics but nothing less a joke and not even that great of a one.
| Guest chapter 12 . 8/29
hey i just have a point to point out (haha!) anywaymy point is that john can't just forget about 46 years of combat expeirence just to throw down his weapons 3 years is nothing in comparison to the 46 years of military action
| Guest chapter 12 . 10/8/2014
What about da chief's mission to da milky way as an ambassador?
| Guest chapter 7 . 10/8/2014
Sangheili plural is Sangheili
| Guest chapter 6 . 10/8/2014
Plural Jedi is just Jedi
| trninjakiller chapter 1 . 7/25/2014
i had to stop reading right when chief said he was scared and that he would become a jedi no problem. ARE YOU A FUCKING MORON!? Chief would never do that. He is extremely well trained in every known marshal art and is enhanced so much he could probably go toe to toe with fucking yoda in a sword figh. now he is also indoctrinated from the age of 6. to not leave, betray, or give away any secrets of the UNSC. so it wouldnt be in a million fucking years that chief would become a jedi.
| Daedric X chapter 1 . 6/11/2014
I'll just say, and do pm back if you have reasons for doing so.
1. Chief decided to not go back UNSC. His entire is deticated there, he was trained to fight and protect humanity and I doubt he would stop halfway just because they got Elites as allies and a batch of Spartan-IIIs
2. Chief took off his armor... I'm sorry, I don't see that on the day he arrive to the Jedi Temple
3. Bowing and calling them Master(s)... I, for whatever reasons, can not see THE Master Chief bowing, saluting yes, but bowing, no. As for calling them Master(s), bit very un-chief like, unless they were military then I could let it by, but Jedi aren't military. The most respectful way for chief would be something like sir/ma'am.
4. John is talkative... Not chief, imposter! Lol. He seems to be very trusting with aliens too... Not even he was trusting to Arbitar till much later, the human Jedis sure, but aliens, trust them over time or something like that
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/23/2014
Sorry to tell you this bro but this story doesnt make sense to me at all john cant be a civie lord hood would not let him stay due to the fact that john is ONI he knows shit and to top it all off he is killer no jedi no sweetheart or nothin of the soet hes a killing machine his oath is the UNSC so it just simply cant be done sorry but this story is not woeth reading
| Divine Protector of Skyrim chapter 12 . 5/30/2013
Plz up date soon it's been 3 yrs. now
| Daisy-023 chapter 12 . 4/30/2013
Get. A. Move. On!
| Zeph3r chapter 1 . 4/5/2013
OMGS TROLL FIC TROLL FIC!11!1!
| Mandalore Requiem chapter 1 . 11/23/2012
I'm sorry but no. I know tier 1 asset like John are trained to adapt and survive, but becoming a Jedi seems well... odd. Being force sensitive I can believe given how "Lucky" he is, but becoming a Jedi I cannot.
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/12/2012
Dude, your insulting the halo series with this story. I stopped reading in the middle of the first chapter. Come on john a civilian and a jedi and his personality is not as it should be either. Just delete this piece of shit and rewrite the right way.
| wallsofmine chapter 3 . 4/7/2012
Ok this story is pretty good but all i have to say is that john shouldn't be a jedi he should be a jedi killer. He was RAISED to be an unstopable killing machine and cause death on a massive scale. Making him a force sensative,sure. Able to weild a lightsabre,fuck yeah. But on the good side where he is restricted thats a mistake. He should have been tricked into being a master jedi killer then find out he was tricked after years of service and realign himself to the jedi not as a jedi but an upgraded armor wearing, lightsabre weilding killing, force using killing machine.