Reviews for Rooftop
XxSakiHurahixX chapter 2 . 7/22/2013
i love it so far pretty please write more :)
rohor chapter 2 . 12/5/2012
has been a very nice story
Guest chapter 2 . 10/26/2012
Kids eat popcorn when they are sad.
LyraMusica chapter 1 . 9/2/2011
Aww, I love reading stories of them together on the roof! Really romantic :) Great job!
UnlockmyHeartforLife chapter 2 . 6/24/2011
If you quit writing I will chop your face off.


I'm JK but i certainly won't be happy, this was an extremely well written story and cute. I only spotted a few grammatical errors, but hell even happens to the best of us (just look at my poor Kyo!). Don't stop being the awesome writer with the awesome name (KAT TURTLE -).

PM ME about the review or just TOPICS IN GENERAL! *hopeful smile*

LuckyTurtle chapter 2 . 2/23/2011
I definitely don't think that your story was a waste! It really was a great idea-so keep writing! Loved it, and, again, great job :)
ManticSky chapter 2 . 6/24/2009
Aww, Kawaii!

Suki desu!
LittleMissMurdered chapter 1 . 3/2/2009
That was SO good! D I almost cried at a couple points! T.T It was AWESOME! You should DEFINATELY add another chapter! D I LOVE IT!
Feelin SPAZTIC chapter 2 . 8/19/2008
Turn it into a story!
smileyBAM03 chapter 2 . 8/8/2008
i love this one shot! fluffy fluff fluff!

you should write more ones like this.
animelvr23 chapter 1 . 7/10/2008
"me:oh that was beautiful! *sniffle* *tear*

shigure:are you crying?

me:huh? no my mom's cutting onions downstairs its burning my eyes!

shigure:...and your crying too.

me:(mumbles something incoherent)

shigure:what was that?


shigure:oh ok! but you hurt my feelings

me:oh im so sorry!

shigure:well a kiss'll make it better!


me:shut up kyo your not supposed to be in my box! grr! nevermind i give up! ok so anyway *kisses shigure* happy now? shigure:maybe..." ja ne!~
animefan88tv chapter 1 . 7/8/2008
aw kawaii! that was so cute! i love kyo he is my favorite character from fruits basket. if he didnt love tohru i would make him mine haha jk. but yeah this was really good. really cute and i loved it
Brown-Eyed Brunnete chapter 2 . 6/14/2008
i thought this was good, but a little too predictable

keep up the good work!:)
animeboylover chapter 2 . 6/10/2008
LOL!your the writer to me it doesnt mater if people like it or a writer is writing,the writer is sharing the ideas and thoughts in his or hers gamed for any story any writer can u can never know when a artist is reading your work and the writer becomes remember all writers started some fro us kids we have fanfiction to start with. lol 3
MysticSorceror chapter 1 . 3/30/2008
Things I like:

I like the setting at the beginning

I like Kyo's thoughts concerning Tohru

Good description

Aww I like the idea of Kyo confessing his feelings

I love how much Tohru cares for the Sohmas

That line is adorable: "Thankyou for saving me"

Cute ending

Things you could work on:

The emotions seem a bit too free

The thoughts aren't really consistent to Kyo's character

Try to structure the sentences in a way to have it flow more

Have new lines for the different character dialogue

Try not to repeat words or phrases

Don't capitalize the dialogue - pet peeve

Work on Kyo's characterization a little more

Grammar issues: Nothings should be Nothing's

Some of the words don't fit the character, I know it's meant to be romantic but it doesn't fit Kyo: "he yelled at his love"

Kyo seems to be acting a bit too feminine in this fic

Awkward wording "he wasn't still upset"

Roof door, there isn't one in Shigure's house they use a ladder

I think that Tohru cares for Akito, you're starting to lack on her characterization

Ground? I thought that they were on the roof

The confession seems a little cheesy to me

I don't really see Kyo sobbing and the news of his mother should have more impact

You should work on different character emotions

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