|Reviews for Rooftop|
| XxSakiHurahixX chapter 2 . 7/22/2013
WRITE MORE !
i love it so far pretty please write more :)
| rohor chapter 2 . 12/5/2012
has been a very nice story
| Guest chapter 2 . 10/26/2012
Kids eat popcorn when they are sad.
| LyraMusica chapter 1 . 9/2/2011
Aww, I love reading stories of them together on the roof! Really romantic :) Great job!
| UnlockmyHeartforLife chapter 2 . 6/24/2011
If you quit writing I will chop your face off.
I'm JK but i certainly won't be happy, this was an extremely well written story and cute. I only spotted a few grammatical errors, but hell even happens to the best of us (just look at my poor Kyo!). Don't stop being the awesome writer with the awesome name (KAT TURTLE -).
PM ME about the review or just TOPICS IN GENERAL! *hopeful smile*
| LuckyTurtle chapter 2 . 2/23/2011
I definitely don't think that your story was a waste! It really was a great idea-so keep writing! Loved it, and, again, great job :)
| ManticSky chapter 2 . 6/24/2009
| LittleMissMurdered chapter 1 . 3/2/2009
That was SO good! D I almost cried at a couple points! T.T It was AWESOME! You should DEFINATELY add another chapter! D I LOVE IT!
| Feelin SPAZTIC chapter 2 . 8/19/2008
Turn it into a story!
| smileyBAM03 chapter 2 . 8/8/2008
i love this one shot! fluffy fluff fluff!
you should write more ones like this.
| animelvr23 chapter 1 . 7/10/2008
"me:oh that was beautiful! *sniffle* *tear*
shigure:are you crying?
me:huh? no my mom's cutting onions downstairs its burning my eyes!
shigure:...and your crying too.
me:(mumbles something incoherent)
shigure:what was that?
me:I SAID YES U DUMB DOG!
shigure:oh ok! but you hurt my feelings
me:oh im so sorry!
shigure:well a kiss'll make it better!
me:shut up kyo your not supposed to be in my box! grr! nevermind i give up! ok so anyway *kisses shigure* happy now? shigure:maybe..." ja ne!~
| animefan88tv chapter 1 . 7/8/2008
aw kawaii! that was so cute! i love kyo he is my favorite character from fruits basket. if he didnt love tohru i would make him mine haha jk. but yeah this was really good. really cute and i loved it
| Brown-Eyed Brunnete chapter 2 . 6/14/2008
i thought this was good, but a little too predictable
keep up the good work!:)
| animeboylover chapter 2 . 6/10/2008
LOL!your the writer to me it doesnt mater if people like it or a writer is writing,the writer is sharing the ideas and thoughts in his or hers gamed for any story any writer can u can never know when a artist is reading your work and the writer becomes remember all writers started some fro us kids we have fanfiction to start with. lol 3
| MysticSorceror chapter 1 . 3/30/2008
Things I like:
I like the setting at the beginning
I like Kyo's thoughts concerning Tohru
Aww I like the idea of Kyo confessing his feelings
I love how much Tohru cares for the Sohmas
That line is adorable: "Thankyou for saving me"
Things you could work on:
The emotions seem a bit too free
The thoughts aren't really consistent to Kyo's character
Try to structure the sentences in a way to have it flow more
Have new lines for the different character dialogue
Try not to repeat words or phrases
Don't capitalize the dialogue - pet peeve
Work on Kyo's characterization a little more
Grammar issues: Nothings should be Nothing's
Some of the words don't fit the character, I know it's meant to be romantic but it doesn't fit Kyo: "he yelled at his love"
Kyo seems to be acting a bit too feminine in this fic
Awkward wording "he wasn't still upset"
Roof door, there isn't one in Shigure's house they use a ladder
I think that Tohru cares for Akito, you're starting to lack on her characterization
Ground? I thought that they were on the roof
The confession seems a little cheesy to me
I don't really see Kyo sobbing and the news of his mother should have more impact
You should work on different character emotions