Reviews for The One in the Shadows
anonyme chapter 18 . 3/21/2012
your fucking story make no sense at all you say something but the next chapter you retract yourself also you change something to the original setup like no electronic work at hogwart but you don't explain how it can work. it's your story true but if your just gonna write what is in your mind at that time go write a one shot
TheGoldenTrioFan chapter 10 . 3/20/2012
oooh ur brilliant. I agree with you about H/G and H/Hr and also with the slash as well!
DarkFlameInfernal chapter 47 . 3/16/2012
really good
McCabeRz chapter 41 . 2/29/2012
Story's like this piss me off you start off good, introduce the story introduce a character with possible relationship then you get him jealous he broods, and then he. Doesn't get with anyone after brooding... You made him from a possible badass to a complete waste of space that loses girls and makes and breaks meaningless relationships



Joe Lawyer chapter 7 . 2/5/2012
I really don’t think you have a handle on how a consummate Slytherin would act in his verbal confrontations with Ron. Ron comes off simultaneously stupid, yet smart enough to get the better of Harry. He wouldn’t respond with weak, pathetic rejoinders. He also would use the powers of Head Boy to either assign detention or take points. Harry, as Head Boy, is above a prefect like Ron who is not acting appropriately for his role or showing the appropriate respect for Harry’s position. Harry comes off retarded in these little confrontations. He wouldn’t allow Ron and his friends to get the better of him and make him retreat back to the castle. If you are really trying to set up a far different Harry, whose mettle was tempered in the Snake common room and by adversity in his family life, why do you keep writing him like the weak retarded fool that canon Harry was?

The story is just not written well enough for me to continue. Your character does not line up with the altered background and life experiences you’ve given him. I wish you well, but this story just isn’t for me.
magic4ever chapter 47 . 1/6/2012
WHAT? this hasnt been updated for over a whole year! update please! its really good.
Guest chapter 17 . 12/15/2011
U prob already passed the due on Ur essay but... BBB!

Write a bunch of bullshit :)))
star.louw chapter 47 . 10/7/2011



This is admittedly one of the best fics I've read: you only have a few spelling mistakes but not much!

Cliffhanger, much?:(

Have you abandoned this story? I hope not!

Guest chapter 19 . 10/6/2011

I was confused before but now I get it... dark doesn't mean evil. It means EMO!

Seriously, I am confused. Harry mopes around a couple weeks and is lonely, thus causing him emotional discomfort. But, uh, as far as I can tell, he's been dealing with emotional discomfort for the last 17 years. Forget all that, though, because two weeks of being "lonely" and he's suddenly ready to flush not only his pride, but his whole self worth down the drain!

Yes, it can be childish to not forgive someone... then again it can also be a matter of being able to look yourself in the mirror each morning and live with the choices you've made. (Or if you want the short, short version of that one: rent/buy/download the movie "The Maltise Falcon" with Bogart... the lovely scene at the end where Boggie tells the femfatale that, maybe we're in love, but in spite of that I'm not gonna play the patsy for you! - - Same concept. It may tear me up inside, but I'm not going to compromise my beliefs just for comfort... or to not be lonely.)

Still... don't want to give the impression I don't like the fic. It's been a fun enough read with some real bright spots. Just a few retarded things too.

Guest chapter 14 . 10/6/2011
There was actually more author's note than story this time... if it keeps up for another twenty some-odd chapters, this story (and account) needs to be bounced.
Guest chapter 13 . 10/6/2011
Dramione... because a bigot and an insecure bookworm always find each other attractive!
Guest chapter 12 . 10/6/2011
is this a fic or therapy... enough with the A/N!
Booker10 chapter 47 . 9/18/2011
Awsome!:)) this sounds great so far! DONT STOP NOWWW!:))
Impstar chapter 47 . 8/15/2011
Noooo, please continue to update. This story is too good to let slip away. I really look forward to another update.
reven228 chapter 47 . 7/5/2011
Purple blood? NAMEKIAN! Anyway, a great story and I hope you eventually finish it. Keep goin and stay golden
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