|Reviews for Caught Up|
| Marcia Andrea chapter 11 . 9/17/2013
me gustó la historia, aunque hubiera querido un beso, jajaja. En fin, hermosa tu historia, gracias por hacerla.
| XxSweetGothicChocolatexX chapter 11 . 5/9/2010
YAYYY im your 100th review! That story was really bittersweet all the way until the end and i really LOVED it! Made my day and motivated me to get up for school thinking " somewhere out there Lavi and Kanda are happy " * fuzzy feeling inside* Great job ! XD
| Allen chapter 11 . 5/6/2010
ah...so this is wat ya were sayin wen ya said tat it had a happy ending but not the ones the readers had in mind...? hm...this ending is interesting...and again you did a wonderful job...cool I luved every minute of reading your story coz it was not vague...it was detailed and the expressions were wonderful...felt real...felt so dark...real...nice job
i hope you write more multi chaptered stories instead of just single chaptered ones...i m looking forward to reading your really "long" stories..plz keep up the good job thx
| Allen chapter 10 . 5/6/2010
-sighs- again the way you have it words the way you express pain, darkness, hate, love and...loneliness...hits me hard...so true...so genuine...good job...i kinda didnt like Bookman-san at the beginning...didn't like it coz he was between Kanda-san and Rabi-san but now...? I am looking forward to read the ending...good job...please keep it up
| Allen chapter 9 . 5/6/2010
hm...i thought it was going well...until Kanda-san decides to go for a mission and Bookman Jr. decides to cnfront Rabi-san...hm...again the way you express even little things, little emotions always shakes me, leaves a deeper meaning...your words...the description...explanation are good...wonderful...
| Allen chapter 8 . 5/6/2010
ah...that's quite strange...the way you express the feelings, every single word about the love, hate and despair makes me feel as if it is really happening...dark...the pain...the way you describe it is unique...so no sad ending...? great...keep up the good work
| Allen chapter 7 . 5/6/2010
hm...that made me kinda rethink...and the dream about deaths...gave me the creeps but it worked well on the dark angsty mood...you are talented...the way you work with words and the detailed meanings...detailed explanations about even tiny things...keep up the good work
| Allen chapter 6 . 5/6/2010
Ah...Jeez! seriously? wen tey luv each other so much...? there r ppl who dont kno luv..yet wen tey luv, tey give it up so easily...? i wish tey wud fight...
| Allen chapter 5 . 5/6/2010
Ah...wat the...? why did Kanda-san lie?...when they luv each other so much...it hurts...i hope it will be okay...good story i like your story the plot...
| Josie chapter 1 . 11/9/2009
I cryed through the whole thing!
| gummy bear chapter 11 . 10/4/2009
| marufu-chan chapter 11 . 7/31/2009
I was scared there would be a sad ending for a while there. I like how you did the story, I enjoyed it. Keep up the great work! n.n
| Shiki105 chapter 11 . 2/4/2009
Rather cute _
Though, I did find that yer mistakes with the tenses kept up the entire duration of the story, but no worries, yo! A few grammar mistakes here an there but nothin criminal, heh heh. And I also noted that sometimes when ya introduced a new section/scene, ya didn't make it immediately clear who's perspective it was and sometimes the scenes shifted and caused confusion (though this might just have been since putting blank line spaces between ya work dun work) an, o course, there was mass confusion at times as to who was speaking, since ya generally used the pronoun "he" instead of names or physical descriptions after or before they said something and when the story's got about five male characters scattered about, interactions can get pretty damn confusin. But for the most part, I understood it :) and I liked the involvement of the other DGM cast members too, especially Komui and Allen _ and it was a very subtle fic and it was quite cute...oh wait, I said that already, yo. Oh well, a nice fic, in total -thumbs up- (and sorry I dint review every chapter; I'm just lazy that way, eh heh heh)
| Shiki105 chapter 1 . 2/4/2009
Heh, that was so cute! And I love angsty! XD nuthin wrong wid a bit o darkness, yo, heh.
Um, some things I spotted with the writing:
Your writing style itself is understandable so kudos for that but...cuz you were writing about interactions between two members of the same sex, it was kinda confusing sometimes to see who was doing what so saying what, if ya get me.
And the speech, you don't really need to start a fresh line if it's the same character speaking as the line above. That's not confusing is it, yo? :\ I mean, it just gives the impression sometimes that it's not Lavi or Kanda's continued dialogue because it's as if your registering another character's presence by using a new line for the dialogue when there wasn't even any text between the last utterance. Eh, now I'm gettin confused, yo :\ I'll give you an example, if it clears things up, heh heh:
"Good bye, Rabi."
"If that's even your name anymore."
See? I presume it's Kanda speaking in both lines cuz there wasn't anybody else there but for a moment I thought the second line was uttered by Lavi, yo.
Eh, just one more complaint:
This story is set in the present tense, right? I noticed you mix your tenses up quite a fair amount. But no worries, at least it's understandable, so, once again, kudos -thumbs up- on to the next chapter!
| bluesonmondays chapter 11 . 9/29/2008
Really nice story, pacing is just right, i can feel the two are not OOC, makes me happy! :D