Hi :) I like your story especially cause I'm a little obsessed with Mel/Danric. However, I think being a little more careful in your writing would really help this story take off. There are just some issues with tense-sometimes you write in the present tense and sometimes in the past- and then there are a few spelling/grammar things. I really like the story but cleaning it up a little bit could make it more enjoyable to read. Keep going. :)

Ohh! Evil doer! Cutting off at that time!

anyways yeah the personalities are a bit off but don't change them I actually like them. There's nothing wrong with having different takes and characters. Can't wait for the next chapter! :D

I think they're still in character, please update soon!

Ooh, now this is an original idea. I like your writing style, it flows nicely and ot's very descriptive.

It's cute. Vidanric is an educated nobleman, though, so I'd expect him to think with a better vocabulary.

Your story is good. There are just some minor errors probably from just typing it up that I noticed in both chapters. I still understood what you meant but those thiings tend to bug me sometimes. I really like this story though! I don't think enough people write them :) Update soon!

This is so adorable! I love how they're both still not quite sure how to converse. It's like Danric to ride with a broken arm. :) Lovely.

I just reread this. The first time, I thought it was okay, but the second time through I thought it was awesome! Please continue!

i think you should continue it! i want to find out what happens.

keep going, it's good!

that was so good HE HE HE

that was amasing

AH! Not only do I like it, I absolutely love it! It's so cute! I'm a sap for mushy stuff, what can I say.