|Reviews for Benedictus|
| Guest chapter 23 . 8/5
There are only 2 things I'm complaining about: the language is the first. The second would be the endding... One half of a chapter woulda done it. Lol
THAT WAS FANTASTIC! The details had me fighting tears. (Cause I remember attempting to comfort someone in my study hall on 9/11 whom had an uncle who worked in the Pentagon. I tend to... Feel things deeply and this had me crying all over again) The feeling and attitudes of Don and Charlie had me thinking about my own brothers. Not the same fight but that stubbornness...
Great story. Thank you for taking the time to write/post.
| Agent ERA chapter 23 . 9/12/2014
Very enjoyable story. I do hope you plan on writing a sequel for it?
| Babybluebelle chapter 23 . 8/21/2014
What a totally fabulous ending!
This left me gasping for breath. I really wanted everything to be fixed between Don and Charlie but it was even more heart wrenching that you ended it like this.
Thank you so much for writing this story. I would love to read some more?
| Guest chapter 23 . 11/16/2013
This story is totally fantastic. I wish you would post the sequel as I can't believe you ended it here!
| Ditte3 chapter 13 . 11/17/2013
It breaks my heart but it is so beautiful.
| Ditte3 chapter 11 . 11/17/2013
Wonderful story. Even if angsty, I enjoyed it. I'm glad they saved the baby.
| Ghanaperu chapter 23 . 6/28/2013
Wow. You ended it there?
This reads just like a novel, and I can see it playing out in my head just like a film. This story is better than this site.
I loved all the references to all the random poems and literature and whatever else you were referencing. It made it seem realer, somehow.
I like that both brothers had good intentions of repairing their relationship, and yet somehow the conversation in the hospital made little to no progress towards that goal.
It seemed right that Colby would be the one to reach him first, the one to hold him up and keep him from drowning - and that Charlie would be so irrationally grateful that it was Colby, because he knew Colby was strong enough. There are many people in the world who would have been strong enough, but he [knew] Colby was.
Amita barely makes an appearance, and I should be disappointed about that, but I'm not. Somehow, she didn't belong in this story. This was never about her.
I tend to hate characters not from the show, because they take away time from the characters I already love. But I didn't, here. How could anyone hate a baby? Especially one that was keeping Don alive? You wrote a good character, and I couldn't hate her.
I'm glad Don didn't die. I'm glad there wasn't the very emotional making-everything-better scene between Don and Charlie that I was hoping for. I'm glad Charlie didn't come to the phone, and I'm glad Don didn't get over that. I'm glad that Alan overheard the conversation with Megan, and I'm glad he didn't blab to Charlie, even. I guess I'm glad for a lot of things - and this is just fiction. I had to keep telling myself that, the whole way through. This is just fiction.
You did an amazing job here. The truths you have here, hidden amongst the words, will stay with me for a long while. This story you told needed to be written, needed to be read. So, thank you.
| Guest chapter 23 . 12/13/2012
Lost for words here, this was fabulous. I really wish you'd write the sequel, as I want to know what happened after this.
| numb3rs mystery chapter 23 . 9/23/2012
Hi Lisa, I know this is 4 years too late but I have to say this story is a piece of art. I like the ending. This open ending made it more epic . You're one of the most talented writers I've ever read for .By the way, since I 'm already many years too late let me say I also love you're story "Random Variables and Heuristic Solutions".
I wish you the best luck in you're life.
| Guest chapter 23 . 8/27/2012
So when is the sequel - I totally loved it!
| AgentD.6 chapter 23 . 6/1/2012
As a huge HPFF reader I just stumbled onto fictions from shows I really enjoy. As an avid Num3rs fan this brought me to your story. I know its been a while but I would love to see the sequel. Yours is trully a joy to read and I love how you enjoy writing so much for Don, he is a great character in all respects. Consider revisiting the Numb3rs fandom once again.
| O.O chapter 23 . 5/5/2012
This was a beautiful story xD
I love how you made it so realistic and honestly... everyone seemed to be in character.
Okay... Imma go find the sequel now
| a chapter 10 . 11/3/2011
It's nice that Charlie decided to 'man-up' to talking to Benedincta's mother, but it doesn't really make much sense. I don't understand the unspoken expectation that speaking with her is Charlie's job. Why would Charlie be the one to talk to her? He hasn't even spoken to Don and all of the information he has about Sweetie Pie is second hand at best. Alan or Megan would make a lot more sense. Alan and Megan have both spoken to Don and Megan has more direct information about the child. If Benedincta's mother just wanted to thank Don's family there's no reason why Don's *father* couldn't be the one to speak to her. Really, Charlie's just doing precisely what he's been complaining about Don doing. He took the task away from Alan to protect him with little regard to the fact that Alan is a grown man and perfectly capable of handling the task. (Not that I think there's anything wrong with wanting to protect his father, but it's kind of a funy thing for him to do when he's been spending so much time complaining about Don doing it to him. Maybe now he'll realize that Don's attempts to protect him don't mean Don doesn't respect him.) Who knows? Maybe speaking with another parent waiting for the rescue of their child would have been good for Alan.
| nessy22 chapter 23 . 8/31/2011
I got just recently to FF and begun to read through. And again more recently I finaly signed in. Your story has to go to my favorites.
This story is very, very, I mean very, good! In fact it is one of the pearls of this site. I spent a lot of "nighthours" to read it (just couldn't stuck!).
I see people are still reading it. It's only a pity the story semms to remain without sequel.
How can we infect you with the Numb3rsvirus again, to get one?
| Cris chapter 23 . 4/3/2011
Wow - and more wow!
I really want Don to make things right with Charlie again. I really want a sequel!