Reviews for Insatiable
wolves2152 chapter 1 . 5/20/2011
niiowl chapter 1 . 6/28/2010
Although wonderfully written, it seems awfully out of character for the both of them. First off, Sasori acting all gushy and babyish? Oh no. Deidara as well, not exactly canon. They're criminals, not housewives.

Also, I found it funny how you described the male orgasm as "unfurling like a flower desperate for the Sun." I honestly laughed out loud. It's a good simile, but not exactly a right one. "Grunting like a sweaty, smelly pig" would have been much more accurate.

You also said the cursed "Dei-kun." And not once, but FOUR times. Four!

You really have such a great and colorful vocabulary. Put it to good use with believable characters and plots!
gapanda chapter 1 . 8/1/2009
Wow! I love this story! It's really good. And even if Sasori is OC it's nice to see him that way. It's very cute ) good job!
Tsukasa Kizuna chapter 1 . 3/18/2009
i didn't notice any spelling mistakes... so yay!

no, honestly, was really good. didn't mind sasori OOC. suited this fic. well done
Ben Tramsami chapter 1 . 5/20/2008
quite wonderful, i must say
Devilis Kyuu chapter 1 . 4/10/2008
Beautiful! I really like the fic
Maelza chapter 1 . 4/3/2008
this is beautiful and Sasori doesn't seem too OoC due to your explanation of how he got there

it really is beautiful and I probably will read the other fiction it's connected XD
Noah Mayfair chapter 1 . 4/2/2008
I loved it. can't wait for the next story u write