Love your story can’t wait to read more

Also you made snape seem good in reality he is an ass that is a murder, rapist, torturer,and child abuser like the rest of the death eaters. Ron has always been dumb and talentless so the story in the beginning is unbelievable!the unspeakables, Harry, Know it all, auors,and Minerva could had them easily with out fell!

he married know it all that sucks now he has to listen to her whine and be bossy all the time even though she is better than the gold digger weasel and her weasel family. You made Harry seem so stupid and powerless against an idiot that was to lazy to study or doing anything besides eat! What a waste of huge magical power Harry has?!

I know this story is probably abandoned, but I just finished rereading it, and I still enjoyed it very much. I just wanted to let you know that it's still loved.

This is really painful to read it's just so rushed he goes back in time and immediately runs into his Father being attacked by a Death Eater and then joins the Potter family? and why be adopted into the family given that he can easily pass as a Potter just say he is a uncle or something

This needs a major rewrite I like the concept but it's got a lot of problems

Yeah Ron doing that is still way over the top it makes little sense even for Ron and the idea that he could succeed even with help is laughable but ok

Why wouldn't he need the Potter Fortune? that makes no sense at all having that money would be extremely useful in beating Voldy for him to leave it behind is moronic why are you making him do stupid things?

So Ron is going to kill Hermione and the kids? I doubt Ron could beat Hermione at anything except for laziness and how would he get past any Magical protection Harry would have put up to keep it safe?

It just isn't really believable that Ron would succeed at something like this unless he has help from the remaining Death Eaters but even then surely the Unspeakables would have placed their own protections around Harrys house seeing as he is a member of the organisation in this story

once again dumbles and his hoard are completely useless and so is ppl like ron - zero talent. a true good chess player would be a great strategist and ron is nothing

I have really enjoyed this story and I hope that you find the time and ability to finish it. Life tends to get in the way of good Fanfiction!

this is a fucking joke lmao ron barely has any talent..

Really why the fuck can’t he ever stay with the last name he made up. Other then that it’s a fantastic story.

Please update

There's such a lack of backstory that I just can't continue past chapter two. When you make such huge changes to the canon timeline (characters living etc), it's best if you establish early on - either in author notes or the first couple of chapters - how the change occurred. Even just a brief description if you plan on exploring it in detail later on. Like in the first two chapters I'm unable to work out what year the timeline changed from the established canon timeline.

Added to that is the overpowered characters, especially Ron Weasley when you've already established that Harry is the greatest. Then there's characters like Minerva and Hermione acting dumb. The scenes themselves and overall writing could use some more work too in order to clear it up.

I'm sure there's a decent story concept in here but I would honestly recommend that you go back and rewrite the chapters with the assistance of a beta, basically ground them more and fine-tune them.

This is BS! HP is a super stong, fights aurors and unspeakables, then loses to RON! RONALD! BILLIUS!
BS!BS!BS!BS!

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