|Reviews for We That Are Young|
| Golden Drachma chapter 80 . 2/24
oh man, i finished reading this amazing piece of writing and I don't have words to express how awesome you handled the character development and how you wrote every single character, the OCs and the canon ones, without wandering into the OOC area, they were written so beautifully that I almost cried. I had a great time reading this, it made me feel so many emotions and it was a long time since I felt such wide range of feelings reading something. I just wanna say congratulations for you sharing this and I admire your writing style and your mind to produce something this wonderful.
| Mcat9905 chapter 61 . 1/26
It took me until this chapter to realize WHY roy hates paperwork so much. He has difficulty reading. ...well it at least has to contribute.
| SheWhoLeavesCrappyReviews chapter 80 . 1/2
This is amazing. Absolutely amazing. I sat in front of the computer for hours and forgot to go out to meet my friends because I was totally absorbed in it. Now my eyes hurt, but I just couldn't help but finish reading your work.
I went through a lot of emotions while reading this (something that hadn't happened in a long time) and I wish I could write a great review that this definitely deserves but sadly, I suck at expressing myself. Honestly, I really really loved reading this.
I found the ending bittersweet, as I really hoped that Roy and Riza would somehow be able to return to how they were before Riza's father tore them apart (as childish and absurd that may be) but I know things really don't work that way. Still, the promise of a better future for them at least makes it a little better. Also, this may be a reason why despite their apparent fondness of each other in the original animated series (I haven't finished brotherhood yet and I am not familiar with the manga's plot), they still don't call each other by their first names. I always thought (and still do to some degree) it was (is) because of professionalism, but your story just makes me think that it is not entirely the case.
| Mcat9905 chapter 27 . 12/18/2013
I am crying. I've been reading this thing for four hours straight and I'm not half way done and I'm not going to be able to finish it tonight before I have to leave it the morning and goddamnit my iPod died a few chapters back so I plugged it into my clock and kept reading just holding the clock in my hand.
I hate you so much.
This is the best thing I've ever read.
| LMPandora chapter 80 . 11/2/2013
This is one of the one of the most well written fics I have ever read, and I thank you for that. I’m not actually sure where to begin with this review, I have so much to tell about the things that I really loved in your fic, but I’m afraid that I might go on blabbing too much and miss out on what really matters.
So I guess I’ll start with the pacing. It was wonderful, just right, and it personally never got draggy for me. I love how you carefully wove each characters personalities and struggles in each chapter and how not one chapter felt rushed. Personally, though, I got more and more anxious when I reached the 70th chapter ‘cause I had no idea when you were going to end it, but you've executed it well. (and it almost – or maybe it had- ripped my heart out when you said that this has a sequel which I just found out a few hours before that was on “permanent hiatus”)
After completing this fic I swore to myself to re-check episodes and chapters containing RoyAi and it just surprised me on how in line it was with canon. It’s all just so accurate, and it really fits the canon timeline so well that it’s made it hard for me to think that this didn't really happen. Though not everything is canonical, like Riza’s birth mother and (since I realized you haven’t probably completed the manga and such, I won’t spoil) something about Roy. But still, it’s amazing how you've connected the dots and how they all fit in so well.
The character development (or well, more accurately, regression) was great. You see the innocence slowly ebb away from the two children, the sanity for Lian and the humanity for Mordred. There were times that I skipped some sentences because it was too hard for me to bear because you’ve written it so well; the raw emotions of the characters, the pain, the selfishness and the hurt. It was executed greatly. I've been wondering in each chapter how and when the biggest change for both Riza and Roy would occur, and when it did it was just—wow. Again, it wasn't rushed, it just naturally happened. You've inputted it subtly in every chapter and it’s great.
But the thing I really loved the most in your fic was how well rounded the side characters were. I’ve hardly seen OC’s in fics that could give you an emotional pull like Doctor Bella’s, Ben and all the others. It wasn't just Riza and Roy’s story, it was the story of everyone around them. Not even most books can pull off what you did in this fic, and that’s what made me love it so much.
You've got exquisite writing skills and I’m so happy to be able to read one of your creations. I hope that, if everything goes well, you can continue with the sequel to this fic. But right now, I’ll just be eagerly waiting :)
Thank you for the wonderful story, hope you write more!
(There’s FMA:B that really follows the manga story line so maybe you should check the anime out? Since I saw that you have a hard time reading manga scanslations on the net)
| twilightfucker chapter 1 . 9/22/2013
I am so glad that his was the first fma Mic that I've read. It was as good as any book I couldve picked up. The detail was amazing I can't imagine the research u must have done simply to get the period to shine through. The arch of this story was simply genius. Even the little asides like bella's intern being winfry's mother. I could go on but there's a sequel that I must read. Thank u for writing something so wonderful.
| Emovation chapter 80 . 9/22/2013
This entire story caused me so much distress. It was wonderful. Did an allnighter just to finish it and I was depressed for the whole day afterwards. Haha. Very realistic and well written. So glad there's a sequel.
| daedra-hearted chapter 80 . 9/17/2013
Although english is not my mother language, i just had to tell how much i love this piece. Back when i was still reading it, i used to read it whenever i was feeling bad or alone - the atmosphere and the characters you've created became really familiar and dear to me. It's strange because it really caused me all sorts of feelings (mostly angst...), more than several books i've read. Thank you for writing We That Are Young.
| cthulhu-with-a-fez chapter 80 . 9/7/2013
This... wow. This is one of the best and most stunning pieces of literature that I have ever had the privilege of reading. I expect that the sequel is of the same caliber, which is above and beyond a significant portion of published literature. My awe and thanks go out to you for sharing this for the consumption of the general public.
| Joy Fahey chapter 80 . 8/20/2013
I'm not sure if this is a good or bad thing, but I read all 80 chapters in one day, ending a little after 2 am... Loved it!
| Kiheitai chapter 80 . 8/18/2013
One of the best fanfictions I ever read, I cried a lot but thank you for this wonderful story.
| AkageIsumi chapter 80 . 7/14/2013
Wow... wow! It took me one week to read your truly, truly wonderful story! This biography you wrote would'nt let go of my mind and I hardly got any work done.
I think this story is marvelous and I truly appreciate it. Keep up the good work!
| Shinjiku chapter 80 . 7/8/2013
Brilliant. This is the story I've always wanted to read. How Roy became who he was. Roy and Riza.. their childhoods are so tragic. Yet that is what makes me hope even more for their future to be better. Thank you for writing this. I'm really looking forward to your sequel.
| AKAAkira chapter 80 . 6/24/2013
Well, this is quite likely the most literary story I've ever seen in this fandom.
The first thing I was blown away by was how well you interwove every thread there was when making this story - from the creation of OCs like Isabella and the Hughes family, to including Sarah Rockbell and Falman, to extrapolating whatever clues that canon gives to their fullest extent. I almost laughed when I first read of Riza's game of "Fuhrer"; at first I imagined that might've been what gave Roy his ambitions of becoming one, and while it didn't quite play out that way, it and everything else I'm too overwhelmed to remember at the moment were all quite innovative and well played.
Another thing was the sheer amount of research you did in building the setting to a very thorough replica of a 19th-20th century setting. I guess this coming from a guy whose research skills are pretty abysmal, it shouldn't mean much, but at the same time it was an exceptional job in immersing the reader into that little schoolroom with students hunched over their slates, the dry goods store that looked like an archaic Wal-Mart, the little stops that was put into the end of each line in a telegram. It's actually almost surprising, because I always think of the times now as "so advanced technologically", and somehow had the audacity to think that even a hundred years ago would be considered "primitive" - and then I was startled to see stuff we still have today like indoor plumbing. Embarrassing, kinda, and humbling too.
I guess the only thing I have to criticize is the integration of real-world cultures in here - mainly Japanese. Greece and (if I remember right) Rome, I thought you would've changed the names of or something, though it's not entirely unreasonable to think that the FMA world is kinda like an alternate Earth, so they could've existed. More surprised at how almost sloppy Japanese was used, though. Mordred's nickname for Riza in her youth was "chibi-chan", which would've been okay in its own. But then the tattoo master came into play, and then my willing suspension of disbelief kinda broke when he tried to use "Shizuka ni shite!" on Mordred, which was also obviously Japanese. It doesn't quite help that Xing was more Chinese than Japanese, and that both the tattoo master's name and his friend's name was obviously Chinese, not Japanese. And lastly - though I'm still not very far in learning Japanese, so take this with a grain of salt - the intricacies of Japanese language (and culture) makes it so that they say things rather indirectly. You might've seen this in subbed anime, where a character says "Urusai!" - this literally means, "You're noisy", and culturally, it's the equivalent of "Shut up". So I think that would've been the better term in that case, perhaps tweaked to "Urusei!" if you want to be colloquial. Even if "shizuka" was used, in keeping with the indirect-speech thingy, it feels more natural to say "Shizuka ni!", with the "shite", "do", part implied - though even then I'm not sure that's a good idea, since (although I'm completely certain this is my imagination now) "shizuka" is a word more aligned with the CALMNESS aspect of silence, so to me it sounds more like "Peace" - not quite the impression he wanted to make.
Uh, setting aside the rant of a newbie at Japanese, this really was a brilliant fic and written professionally. I'm eager to check the sequel out, and though I read that it's on a hiatus now, I'm enjoying Roy and Riza's mesmerizing backstory way too deeply to stop anytime soon. Thanks for the treat!
| Waffles Risa chapter 61 . 5/22/2013
OOHHHHHHH SO SARAH WAS THAT SARAH! O_O *mindblown