|Reviews for The Start of the Year|
| EffingClouds chapter 1 . 4/6/2008
| Sandra Starck chapter 1 . 4/6/2008
This one-shot is good. I'm looking forward to reading the other one-shots you've written in this series.
There are some tiny corrections to be made:):
1) The very first part of the first sentence is written twice - that's a bit confusing.
2) "It’s a you, Head Girl, taking a short break to stretch your legs and clear your mind with me, Head Boy.” - I'm not sure that "a" belongs in front of the "you".
3) “On my honor as a marauder.” James swore. - Marauder has to be capitalized. And the period behind "Marauder" has to be a comma.
I really like your portrayal of James and Lily.
| zammorley chapter 1 . 4/6/2008
i really liked it! its so sweet and adorable. you're a really good writer!
| dtp10 chapter 1 . 4/4/2008
very good story. it is very well written and i enjoyed reading it. keep up the good work!