|Reviews for Girls' Night Out|
| takara410 chapter 1 . 4/30/2009
i like it continue
| Kryptonfox chapter 1 . 10/8/2008
Ooh, a Spryman story! I don't think there can be enough of these on the net, but nevertheless I have a few critiques.
* Throwing in a whole bunch of details about an original character into one paragraph is generally not a good idea. You have a nice way of phrasing things, but we really don't need all this info about Elina right at the start. (It might turn on the Mary Sue alarms. )
* The conversation between Elina and Spryman should be a little...more in depth. The conversation that led to their breakup was less than 10 full sentences, after all.
I'd love to see this fic updated, since Ozzy and Drix is one of my favorite shows; and I've always thought Spryman was an interesting (yet selfish!) character. I'd like to see the dilemma he faces in this story. And the image of him being whacked in the face by her hair was cute. XD
| snakeboy33 chapter 1 . 4/13/2008
This could be interesting, please upload soon, I will review on each chapter if you do it fast.