So, Gohan and Goten already know about Decanmous and the rings (presumably since it was a two-year project)? There's something kind of odd about how that meeting goes down... though I can't quite put my finger on it.

(Totally dig the "you looked like Piccolo" line, but unless Decanmous flying to Gohan's house is a rarity, it seems kind of odd... of course, Decanmous flying to Gohan's house probably is a rarity, so... you should mention that (sooner?). :P.).

There's a lot of explaining that is needed in the whole of the Gohan and Decanmous scene. What was Goten doing? Is there a way we can explain some of the missing stuff in dialogue, actions or descriptions instead of thoughts or narration? (Decanmous seems in a bit of a hurry to make that easy... :D ). Would there be some other detail about the Rings that would make them easier to track (I.E... is there something about them that is rimonissent(SP?) of Goku or Dende?)?

Woah, totally loving the Tratz Secray conversation... it makes the LoW-Verse way more interesting and fleshed out, and heck, adds a good deal to the random extra people we see throughout the universe in Z and GT. And the Threat Level system is just fun. :D. Kakarot/Goku confusion? Awesomes!

Awe, cliffhanger. :(.

O I Ka Ke Ro! Doragonbohru! Sekkai no itto ikashita dorama...

Well, maybe "powaa no ringu!" would make it more accurate here. :D.

The first paragraph reads kinda lazily. :D. Like, it basically assumes the reader has already seen the last episode of GT...

Though, if it was too fleshed out a recap, I'd probably get bored and not finish (unless it was that awesome, but...). So... do with that what you will.

"News of the loss of Goku spread throughout the Universe..." I can so imagine the narrator saying this paragraph verbatim over an anime montage. Though, it leaves the invisioning of that montage 100% to the reader's imagination...

Cyba's first scene is utterly lacking in detail. Though (I've got to stop this counterbalance thing...? Maybe?), if it were too elaborate, it could easily give off the "check out my awesome OC that you'll love!" feel that is all too meh.

I like how you fit so much information into a couple sentences in Anoreha and Cyba's conversation. XD (though admitedly a lot of that has to do with me knowing what most of it means already... :( ).

“I understand why you wish to leave, but I cannot." Sounds like a politician giving a speech... not how I'd expect Anoreha to talk to Cyba about something that means a lot to both of them...

Squaas leaves me imagining a somewhat Jolly Saiyan version of Squat... maybe a little bigger and a little less fat... :)

Tratz and Lentra referencing the past stuff and the Bigfoot-esque status of the Saiyans post-Freeza is what made the Ni Asyas in this chapter awesome instead of just another wave of alien invaders (... of which most were from the movies, weren't they?).

"As they neared the moving power level, they soon discovered that it was not Saiyan." How?

Something else that might be interesting would be how Yetkla and Makradus react internally to their first moments on Earth... though since they've likely been to a wide variety of planets throughout the universe, I'm not sure of the best way such a thing might be done.

The beginning of the Decanmous meets the NiAsyas scene has a "bearly better than DBRoP" feel... and definitely needs more show and less tell.

... Makradus grabbing Decanmous is the first time I remember reading any details on what Decanmous looks like.

Makradus and Yetkla are all business. Hehehehe.

Yetkla and Makradus make an interesting duo. :D

"...to dissipate without revealing his foes. “Hmm… I didn’t mean to kill them.”". Hehehehe. The way that's tacked on there feels kinda twoedged. I wonder which would get the point across better: adding a description to how he talks in this part, or leaving it as is. (I'm being serious... there's something both amusing and animated about the way it makes his voice sound with minimal descriptions accompanying his lines. :D. ).

... Is it just me, or is Yetkla an eager suckup? :D

Wow chapter 2 was pretty exciting. Getting startred with the action already. I like when the fighting start off early, but I think that Tratz and Yektla are seriously misinformed if they think that the Saiyans will be easy to defeat. I still think that both Gohan and Vegeta will be the trump card in this battle between the Saiyans and the Ni Asyas. Though I will admit that I do believe that the Ni Asyas have a few powerful warriors in their rank as well. Regardless this is a fight worth seeing. I also liked that saying you used "Eager little whelps." Hehehe I might have to stael that line from you. I liked it that much. Anyways keep those chapters coming, cause you've got a fan in me. So update soon. great job

Wow that's some beginning. That's a lot of original characters. I'm going to need a cue card to keep up. Nonetheless I enjoyed this. I liked the whole feel to this. I liked that this took place after Goku merged with the dragon. I liked the originality of this, but I have a few concerns as well. Will you be giving a backdrop story of some of your original characters? I'd like to get to know them personally. Other than that I loved it, and I can't wait to read more. Also is this fic gonna be centered around Pan? I hope so. So come on get to updating, or I'll just have to cheat and see what's going on beforehand by reading Dragonball: Rings of Power. So get to writing, or I'll get to reading. Great job. Laters.