this is maybe my 3rd time trying to read this story and i think i'll stop here bc it is really starting to annoy me.
someone else made a remark about it but the passive sexism is really pissing me off. it is small remarks likefrankie could be such a girljust bc he's crying, orhe's a dancer but there is nothing feminine about him, his movements are not meak or womanishas if you need to be feminine to dance, fyi not all women dancers are feminine, being feminine is not a requirement to be able to dance, also thethis is a girl thingand acting disgusted, come on, you wrote this in late 2000 not in the 1960s, at least put a warning idk but the lack of it makes me think that you still think that way.
also, you write too many things wrong, it started with the woman who owns the second hand shop in the first chapters sometimes you wrote 'clare' or 'clair' or 'claire', just make up your mind? and if you want to write french, write it correctly or just don't bc its neitherisle de frazesnorisle du fraises''
alsohe was, as the french say, deshabille, or not dressed correctlynoone in france say that, bc it doesn't mean anything beingdeshabillémeans being without clothes, so naked. another onela hotel du malfoy''
anyways, i don't think you wrote one french word correctly, but you're not the only writer who does that.
i'm not stopping here just for those things though, harry's mood is constantly changing, you made his health relapse for no reason, he could have been fine, now he's constantly puking and barely getting better, also its chapter 21 and he doesn't see his friends from the club at all ?
i can't believe this is only a third of the story, it was an interesting start, i kept reading it bc i liked the plot with him working at the club, discovering himself, making friends, doing things he likes with his dancing, martial arts, painting. but the plot suddenly changed, now he's sick again, he's back in the wizarding world, he trains to kill voldemort. this story is getting too long for a plot that is only half as interesting as it was in the beginning.

This is my third time trying to read this story all the way through. It’s an interesting concept. But I always forget how much the author disparages all the female characters. They are all written as annoying/untrustworthy/unintelligent/ or a nuisance. Hermione, Narcissa, Pansy, Harry even makes a comment that one of the OC is touchy/whiny “like a girl.” Why the hate?

I’m confused. It’s only the beginning of June but they’ve all been at Malfoy Manor for months. Shouldn’t the kids be in school still? Hogwarts summer break doesn’t start until well into June.

Why didn't they apparate? Both are over 17, and it was an emergency. Reading for who knows how many times. Think this just occurred to me.

At chapter 16 now and.. Yeah, this has become an entirely different story. It feels like Harry inexplicably dropped from 16 to 10 years old as soon as Lucius's man found him. All the amazing character growth he had with James and Frankie just completely disappeared.

Harry can apparate 900 miles without a break. How much stronger magically does he need to be? The magic appears to be there, it only needs training in other uses.

I’m at chapter 18 and I think I’m gonna tap out. The chapters just feel like long filler and its getting boring. Also Harry is really annoying and childish. I really thought he was getting mature while he was with Johnny and Frankie.

Bruh wtf is this trash. Why tf would Harry even consider sucking cock wtf. He's a bloody wizard️ He can be gay but he's not a fucking loser

*sigh* What Harry did WAS pretty stupid, but, he keeps getting punished for things that he wasn't told not to do...

i really like the story, but the change to narcissas character is a bit sad. she loved her son enough to look voldomort in the eyes and lie to him.

other than that I love the story. the johnny and freddie ark was very wholesome (ironically enough)

Im never getting over Juice of Oranges that is A1 quality hilarity

Oh my soul! Aziz! My name is Aziza, i am living!

So im almost postive this is a good story but , for future refrence. Its better if we know how old Harry is, we get its AU so the story line has deviated but this could be anywhere between 4-6 th year and maybe even seventh cuz he can apperate but if it was deventh he wouldnt still be underage. So its weird and hard to understand for context next time state his age or the year in the first couple of pragraphs so its not so disjointed to read.

I really enjoyed this story :)

Lucius complemented Harry on his improved handwriting. In the chapter where Harry is writing put a grocery list with Frankie & Johnnie Harry wrote with a copperplate hand. What happened? Copperplate or spencerian both are beautiful penmanship. Early training that stays with you for a lifetime.