|Reviews for No Dominion|
| Mahine chapter 8 . 10/9/2008
That chapter was totally awesome! Seriously, I was on the edge of my seat the whole time, Supernatural should employ you as a scriptwriter!
| Poaetpainter chapter 8 . 10/9/2008
I gotta say thats pretty freakin awesome
| Mirajane Scarlet chapter 8 . 10/8/2008
I might have asked this before, but... any chance the name Atherton has anything to do with Firefly?
And "fratricidal corpses", huh? So that's what that'd be called. Fratricide.
There are some small errors, mostly that I am too tired and lazy to point out, but nothing big. Just mixed up words, like 'come one' instead of 'come on'. Basically, the kind of stuff the spellcheck wouldn't catch.
And I particularly like this part: "His brother was sitting on the steps, bent forward with his elbows resting on his knees. His hands hung loosely, periodically twitching from the tremors Dean still was unable to stop. But this wasn't what scared Sam. What scared him was the look in his big brother's eyes. It wasn't fear. It wasn't despair. It was a look that said we're all gonna die and I couldn't give a fuck.
Dean was giving up. His there's-always-a-way, fight-or-go-down-swinging brother Dean was giving up."
I also like the switch between the scenes, the extreme action of the scene in Hell, and the silence and anxiety of the scene in the real world. And I like how you not only describe the original demons well, but that they fit in with the surrounding forest-type area.
And Dean is way hotter than Michael Scofield. Even completely whacked out, crazy, and with half his guts hanging out.
As for the ending... what, what, what, what, huh? Wow... seriously, you're like on level with Kripke. Actually, except for how mind-numbingly awesome it is that in the actual show they've managed to link up everything so nicely (from season one to season four, and it all links up so seamlessly!), I almost like this version of events better.
P.S. Seriously, you have to update this soon. I am beyond curious as to what's going to happen next.
| ChaiGrl chapter 8 . 10/8/2008
WHAT AN AMAZING CHAPTER! WHAT AN AMAZING ENDING! YES, THIS DOES DESERVE ALL CAPS. WELL WORTH THE WAIT! CAN'T WAIT TO READ MORE. I'M ON THE EDGE OF MY SEAT! UNTIL THAT TIME THOUGH, TAKE CARE AND HAPPY WRITING!
| Gipsyspider chapter 7 . 10/6/2008
ohh! your evil leaving us hanging like that. plz update soon.
| src13 chapter 7 . 9/3/2008
Wow, that was disturbing...well written but still disgusting. Can't wait to see what the demons do to keep Dean there.
| Gala000085 chapter 7 . 8/17/2008
Time you had a little fun? Should I be worried at all here? Awesome chapter; absolutely brilliant. Just...please get Dean out of Hell. I'm not too proud to beg because the Hell you have created is freaking horrible. Which I suppose Hell is supposed to be. I'll shut up now.
| jenilee chapter 7 . 8/16/2008
Great chapter. Man, poor Dean you are giving that boy all kinds of “Hell”…lol.
I’m so glad Sam found Dean. I don’t know how much more either of them could have taken and I can’t wait to see the fight out of there! Cos you know they aren’t gonna give him up that easily. No Quarter, eh? Can’t wait.
Just have to mention too that you have some really great descriptions in this chapter, actually the whole story but this chapter had some especially good ones and the part with the white-ish lumps and fragments of bones was particularly vivid in my head. Eew. Glad I wasn’t eating.
| PADavis chapter 7 . 8/15/2008
The imagery of the field and Dean burying so manyu copies of Sam was really wrenching. Beautifully told.
| Batman'sBeauty18 chapter 7 . 8/15/2008
Ah this was so good!
Yay please update soon...
| InSecret chapter 7 . 8/15/2008
Oh oh oh CREEPY! But super. :-)
| kirallie chapter 7 . 8/15/2008
Glad he finally got through to Dean that he's the real Sam. So how much of a fight will they have to get Dean out of there?
| Danica West chapter 7 . 8/15/2008
Oh the angst, the angst! you're a very, very evil person, making Dean go through all that.. I mean, wow! :)
But man, was I glad when Sam finally found him - *relief sigh* but still, with all the blood, angst and tortured Dean you still managed to make me laugh - I loved the whole part where Sam is trying to convince Dean that he's "real"..
"Dude, wait you turn" lol..
awesome chapter! You rock, dudette.. you toally rock!
| happycabbage75 chapter 7 . 8/15/2008
“Aren’t you a little tall for a storm trooper?”
LOL - Great line and oh so Dean.
| Mirajane Scarlet chapter 7 . 8/14/2008
Aww, Winchester hug!
I think maybe the part with Charlotte nearly dying was a little bit over the top, but it was still pretty good.