|Reviews for Reload|
| Cersesi chapter 11 . 3/7
I like it.
| Iryelb chapter 11 . 3/4
I really enjoy this story, I found out about it through xZarkko who based a Harry Potter fanfiction he's writing on this story's premise. I look forward to reading the next chapter.
| antheunis011 chapter 6 . 2/22
... damn those two are nuts. How long have they lived again?
| Zemratsu chapter 11 . 1/27
Will this ever be updated again!?
| Luckylee the Ruckyree chapter 11 . 1/26
This is by far my favorite Naruto fic. Are you ever gonna update it?
| sendicard chapter 11 . 1/13
That's the most disappointing end to an epic story I've ever seen. Of course it wasn't meant as an ending but, well we all know that ship has sailed. Whether you continued it on another site or in your own home doesn't really matter, as I'll probably never see it. Oh well.
I'd offer some criticisms like I always do at the end story review, some things to work on and some strengths to really work with; the works. Well, I guess I could only explain my reasoning for not doing so accordingly.
In the world of technology if you get a 4 year degree, almost everything you learned in your first year will be outdated. This doesn't just count for technology, it also counts for personal skill. The last update was 2009, it's now been a little over 4 years, so 1/4th of anything I say right now will probably be obsolete, if not all of it.
It is now 2014, and if you are alive, well I'm sure you've improved much past that point.
So instead of throwing forward constructive criticisms, I'm just going to describe how much I enjoyed this story in the hopes that you might see it someday.
I actually found this story on TVTropes, but didn't read the actual description on there until reading this story just now. The article simply doesn't do this story justice, although it also says nothing about ending early now does it? I'm not entirely sure how the article got anything about this being the final repeat, unless you said something earlier that I missed. Oh well...
Anyway, this had me bursting into laughter on quite a few occasions, and even the so called "crack" was logical and thought out, explained and monitored. If this is you're crack, I can only imagine your version of a real plot. By the gods it might just be legendary. Also might be an overly drawn out piece of buttered poo. As I said, even this story was so drawn it out bored me at times...
Regardless of momentary boredom, this story has indeed had me coming back for the past few days, and for good reason. It endlessly throws forward new thrills and ideas while backing them up with science that makes sense. Is most of it just kind of made up? I'm sure, but you make it sound both believable and real, take us there and let us see the diagrams and seals. I came here for comedy and stayed for both the lovable rendition of the characters and just how logical and epic the so called "crack" is. I know the meaning of "Crack" in fanfiction has definitely changed over the past four years, but I find the difference to be almost too much to grasp if this is average. Which means it isn't, obviously isn't.
I could go on and on with wordings that sound refined but are really just tired ramblings from someone who doesn't want to let a dead story go, but all I'll say really rounds down to this final point.
I loved this story, and if it was finished it would have earned it's place as my 27th favorite. I know it doesn't mean much, but I've been here for years, sent in over 3000 signed reviews,(most of them more useful then the ones I've sent here, hehe...Whoops.) and I've only got 26 favorites for GOOD reason.
It isn't an overwhelming quality either, you're writing is great but you use a lot of weak or hard to imagine adjectives, leaving us on our own a lot.
No, this story would have earned a favorite because of the massive and obvious amount of effort shown and put into this story. Effort that continues to excel and break barriers, send messages through pretty wordings and shimmer it's way into our hearts with greed filled pride, pride that has been earned.
The comedy is well thought, the work is well done, the science is well...science. It was worth the read for sure, my only regret being that the author, you, never got to finish it. I don't know whether life got in the way, or unfortunate and overly saddening death but... I understand either way, because no one would leave something like this purely for sake of laziness. Whatever you're doing, I wish you luck, you deserve it.
| sendicard chapter 10 . 1/12
Damn it, when I finished this last night I was overly tired so I thought sleeping might be able to make a better review. It didn't, I can't remember much of what I was going to say.
I know I was going to mention that you use a lot of words that would require backup, without using the backup. For instance, the only real description we got from the siren scene was the "disappointed" look or "disapproving." I don't know about you, but I have absolutely no idea what a disappointed or disapproving siren looks like. The worst part about it was that you just continued to throw out more synonyms for disappointed, instead of giving us an actual picture of the look at all. I would have just ignored it but this isn't the first time...
The second point I was going to bring up was quite simply, where the hell is Hana during all of this shit? I know she's at the hotel, but why? What is she doing that causes her to miss all of this shit? I do believe she's here on a mission but you never quite told us what.
| sendicard chapter 9 . 1/11
That was pretty awesome, and funny. I love how you managed to naturally change the battle from a festival of destruction, into a comedy session with an slight ally shift. If that makes any sense, it was funny.
Itachi's was even better.
I did note however that you used the word "almost" 53 times this chapter, seems 15 times, seemed 31 times, and that's just the cop out words I looked for.
What I'm saying is that you are relying on said words instead of giving a clear picture with actual description, especially in times of combat. I don't want to know what "seemed" to have happened or "almost" happened, unless there is a reason it only seemed or almost happened that way. If it actually happened, it should be "seemed" or "almost." Probably not making too much sense here either, kind of blank right now to be honest. This story is great and all but it's kind of tedious at times and it really numbs my mind.
Sure there was quite a bit of stuff I can't remember, but oh well.
Oh, ya, why doesn't Tsunade give a shit about the blood? Better yet, why didn't Naruto try something involving blood when fighting her? Hemophobia and all.
| sendicard chapter 8 . 1/10
You're wrong. When you go on about the Biju and their abilities inside a host, you state that naruto's shapeshifting ability can't make inanimate objects. That, would be wrong. Naruto turns into a weapon in the wave arc, and I do believe there are a few more occasions like that throughout the series.
I also noticed that in recent chapters you sometimes use the same word two to three times in the same sentence. I do believe one example was with the fireworks earlier, with the word "overhead." Redundancy isn't good, nor is overusing the same word. Nothing too important as it is a rare earlier, but it is noticeable if you look.
| sendicard chapter 7 . 1/10
My god things move slowly in this story. I mean it, I just realized that we are only a few days from the very start. I'm under the impression of maybe around a week? That's amazing, how do you? Not important I guess, so much in so little time, while making it feel like a realistic span of time though... That's fantastic.
| sendicard chapter 6 . 1/10
Damn. Kind of confusing at times, still, but extremely convincing. Those poor... poor, horrible priests.
How do they get away with all this shit without catching Hana's attention? Just a bit much, don't you think?
| sendicard chapter 5 . 1/10
Haha, holy shit. They did all that before Hana even woke up huh?
How long are these loops anyway? Is it until they die or? Just curious.
| sendicard chapter 3 . 1/9
That was some funny shit man, some funny shit.
You said it was "Crack" though, not really sure it fits under the definition. It definitely has a foreseeable train of logic that could have ended up like this under the circumstances that were put forward. Whatever though, crack, comedy, it's hilarious either way.
| sendicard chapter 2 . 1/9
Hahaha! Poor Hana, poor everyone involved. I'm, assuming this is a case of looping? Of some sort? Pretty damn well obvious, funny as all hell though.
I might have to use that sometime. "I will not have this... MUTINY in my subconscious."
Not in writing, I mean in real life. Could be funny if I use it right.
| sendicard chapter 1 . 1/9
While I was really confused at times, I'll state that I'm pretty sure the was the point. I was also laughing my ass off, constantly. So... Good work.