Reviews for The Watchman
regfurby chapter 36 . 12/7/2017
Light may have started with good intentions, but he got drunk with power and started indiscriminately killing anyone who opposed him regardless of their innocence, so he's definitely a villain.

L on the on the other hand always gave me the vibe that while he chooses to use the law against criminals, it's only a starting point for him, and he would eventually employ more permanent means to stop criminals if normal methods do not work, so who knows what he could have become if he was allowed to reach his full potential?
TrynaHelpHere chapter 93 . 12/2/2017
I honestly can't take this story seriously after chapter 16. It's been quite...mind-numbing. And I can't believe I read until 43 of this mess. Sorry for being blunt and rude but seriously?
This whole story is just glorifying Rorschach and condemning the Justice League. And plus you didn't even capture Rorschach's personality, style of speaking or even his mannerisms. Rorschach isn't your average edgy 'I'm terrible as a human but I'm right anyway' hero. Rorschach is a paranoid, sociopathic, righteous-mindset, violent, unrelenting anti-hero who has a phobia of women by calling them whores. Not whatever Gary Stu you turned him into.
Rorschach is supposed to have short, straight to the point, and blunt way of talking. For example.

"Hurm. Convenient. Would say that you're insecure. But need to inspect further."

In this fic, you've made him speak in whole essays of sentences of specific and dull ways to speak. No distinction to his established Gary Stu character you've given him. And no, Rorschach can't beat all of those supervillains just because he's willfull and uncompromising. In the end, he's still a human and he can die just as easily. I love Rorschach and all but you've made him untouchable here. So much so that I dislike him in here. This isn't Rorschach. This isn't Walter Kovacs. This is a stupid plot drive that can't be killed using Rorschach's name.

Why the hell are the Justice League a bunch pussies? Rorschach spits some fraction of truth and then they have identity crisises? What the hell? Why is Batman, the greatest detective in the world, expert at being unkillable and ex machina plot driver, being an emo waste bucket while Catwoman is being a nymphomaniac who is just supposed to be a cutboard character that agrees with Rorschach undirectly?

Haven't you thought for once that maybe you're giving Rorschach too much things? Too much convenience and plot armor? And then when you give Terra an Omega level power after their visit to another dimension (that whoel arc was pretty pointless) which made her basically fucking Godlike. There's no point in caring for these characters. And then Ace just drops in out of nowhere and already knows what to do and who Rorschach is. That is just lazy.

Every character in this fic is basically a tape recorder and they say the same thing and remind us of the same thing. Repeating the same lines over and over. The whole "Justice League gives hope. I'm here prevent it from getting worse. Your ideals of no killing code is not right. It's not the easy way but the right way. Blood on your hands. Bla bla bla." The dialogues are always the same. It's boring to read.

I've also skipped ahead and read the last few chapters and dear god it just got worse. Not only are you applying the multiverse plot (which is pretty trashy because the tags were JUSTICE LEAGUE and WATCHMEN only) but you're fanserving fandoms. That's the point where you need to realize that you didn't make a fanfiction of Rorschach. You made a fanficion with Rorschach. And then a bunch of other series, cartoons, comics, mangas, and games were added, you messed it up when you added that. You really, really messed up.

Because I came here to read a Watchmen fic with the JL. Not a fucking multiverse fanservice. So many problems yet it'll take a whole book to list them. So I'll just say that next time you write a story, stop gloryifying your main characters for the sake of jerking them off.
kaiser0kolovos chapter 1 . 11/29/2017
Don't know if you still read the reviews at this point, but I just wanted to say that DC is making a cross over series with the Justice League and the Watchmen series. I found it funny because the ad for it played a minute after clicking in your fanfic.
Darkscythe Drake chapter 93 . 11/26/2017
Who is in the Outlaws?
thepkrmgc chapter 13 . 11/5/2017
shame that nobody has the sense to just give rorschack the lethal injection
thepkrmgc chapter 12 . 11/5/2017
lasso of truth op
thepkrmgc chapter 11 . 11/5/2017
how did rorschach survive getting shot, his coat isnt made of steel and even kevlar can only do so much
thepkrmgc chapter 10 . 11/5/2017
i wonder how the shopping heroes will react to that excessive use of force in front of them
thepkrmgc chapter 9 . 11/5/2017
you should make rorschach into an all out villain, because in this idealistic world he genuinely is one
thepkrmgc chapter 8 . 11/5/2017
what do the villains from out of town think of the dimensionally misplaced psychopath?
thepkrmgc chapter 5 . 11/5/2017
so much for batman being the world's greatest detective, cant even follow the tril of a very badly hurt rorcharch
thepkrmgc chapter 4 . 11/5/2017
why hasnt batman called in jl reinforcements?
thepkrmgc chapter 3 . 11/5/2017
might want to focus on the broader themes that make watchmen interesyting instead of just having rorcharch brutally kill people
thepkrmgc chapter 2 . 11/5/2017
huh, i didnt think this happen so soon, might have wanted to start with some more obscure supervillain before going straight to dc's big names
thepkrmgc chapter 1 . 11/5/2017
i pity the dcu, rorcharch puts the local heroes and villains alike to shame
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