Reviews for The Birth of Chao Bao Zi
Zefie Kirasagi chapter 1 . 4/23/2008
Heh, interesting...I've seen a few stories done before about Chao and her cohorts of the Chao Bao Zi, but not one like this. Although, I was a bit confuzzuled at the end - either Chao's a dude P or Hakase dunt know much about biology XD

~ZK
Twisteddarkness225 chapter 1 . 4/22/2008
good so far. looking forward to more.

Yuri fanfictionist

-Yurifan225
DarkDragonDave chapter 1 . 4/22/2008
A very good first attempt. Just one minor thing:

Get a proofreader. Hopefully you have someone who is willing to look through your fic before you post it. A second set of eyes can be invaluable. For example, you used the word "chief" when I'm sure you meant "chef" and that can lead to... (Gets image of Master Chief wearing an apron and a chef's hat while holding a cake)... Anyway, moving on...

A very good story and an interesting look at how Satsuki joined up with the Chao Bao Zi.
Spotstar chapter 1 . 4/22/2008
I think we need more stories on Satsuki. Or heck, the polygamy of Chao Lingshen...

That was really good for a first, keep it up!