|Reviews for Legacy|
| Futura Black chapter 18 . 9/22/2011
| Sascha Vykos chapter 18 . 4/2/2011
Your story brought closure, of a sorts, to my favorite childhood cartoon! It's brilliance and complexity is worthy of professional recognition, but I hope mine counts! This cartoon holds a particular nostalgia for me, and I have obsessed over it since its original run in the early eighties! For you to have brought it to an acceptable conclusion has done something magical to my heart, so much so that I had to have my wife read it with me (she, also, is a lifelong fan). We both agree that you have captured the essence of this show's magic, and we are grateful to you for your dedication and love for the Realm! You brought us to tears! Lady, I feel as if my life has been completed by your story. Thank you, dear, thank you.
| Fist Finder chapter 18 . 7/19/2010
So sorry for the double post
and all but I just noticed
something real amusing.
The main villain the so
called nameless one etc
reminds me a lot of Lord
Voldermot or what ever
he is called from the
Harry Potter series.
The Dark Lord etc He
Who Must not be named
etc,, that made me
laugh out loud.
Oh and by the way I
liked your character
Ayesha but maybe I
might be feeling a bit
biased over here since
that is my mothers name
as well as my cousins :)
So I am honored that you
mentioned them. :)
| Fist Finder chapter 18 . 7/19/2010
Can I add a Comment or two
if you don't mind that is.
First of all I want to say
that I am real sorry that it
took me this long to review
your story. But the truth is
that sadly it was only today
that I managed to finish
Yes I had found it a few YEARS
earlier but due to some reason
or the other I could never find
time to read all of it.
But yesterday I said to myself
enough is enough you don't like
to leave things unfinished so
I sat down and read the entire
story from where I had left of last
time though I guess I should have
started from the start to refresh
my mind of what I may have forgotten
but I felt that if I did that then
chances were that I would never
get to complete this great story.
Congratulations on that. It is is
a good thing though that there are
not a lot of D & D stories on this
site so I could find your story
pretty easily. Am looking forward
to more of your work.
My second point is in regards to your
work. Let me make myself clear on
something Even though as a kid I always
loved the show I never got to see all of
it just a couple of episodes here and
there so some things would have been new
to me and unexpected yet I liked the
surprises. Another thing you should know
about me is that I clearly don't like
change so I like what is considered
cannon and anything else I feel uncomfortable
it is possible that this is due to that
since I was a Kid I always wanted to
work in the comic industry and for that you
need to be aware of a whole bunch of back story
and history of the characters and all that
and you cant change that so you can clearly
understand that when I started reading your
story and discovered that not only did the
kids not only come home but they now had been
married and had kids etc.
I said to myself here we go again another
story with so and so pairings etc and look
we got some kids in this new story that are
related to the main characters. Bet you know
what to expect. But to my surprise and
astonishment when I decided to give your
story a chance which you deserved. I actually
enjoyed myself throughly.
Yes there were parts of the story that I already
predicted what was going to happen but then
again I can't really fault you for that as there
are only a limited ideas that are there and
we just use and reuse them differently. Its like
having a gift and opening and repacking it with a
different wrapping paper again and again.
For instance when the original DM came to the
rescue I knew instantly that was him before he
was even revealed. As for Clarice the moment
she started talking cryptically near the end
I figured out who she was but then again I can
only assume that was your intention all along
since I know for a fact that I am not the
smartest guy on the block :)
anyhow all that I can say is keep up the good
work and if you decide to do anymore
cool stories even if it includes your new characters
please do inform me as I will clearly
enjoy reading about them.
If you have anything to add please do
inform me as soon as you can
I am not that hard to contact
| Redneck Badger Lord Drizzt chapter 18 . 9/26/2008
Any chance of a sequel, or at least a continuation?
| Knites chapter 18 . 7/26/2008
Well, I read the whole thing. and while I wish a little more of the "gushy stuff" could have been a little higher than PG-13, I was very satisfied with this story. I loved the Cavalier/Squire Father/Son twist. I was really happy with the Diana/Eric resolution. The Dungeon Master Nanny thing seemed a bit weak for motivation on the DM's part, but was cute nonetheless. I would have liked a little more Hank/Shelia, but this was really more and Eric/Diana Bobby/Terri story, so that can be forgiven. Also, a big momnet for Presto was missing. It would have been nice to see Varla support him and see him pull something really useful out of that hat of his. The mirror was good, but there could have been better. Alot of Bobby in this fic. Usually, I'm not a big Bobby fan but you really turned me around.
The thihg that was absolutlely flawless in your story was the characterization. It was perfect-particularly Eric's. You really have a strong sense of how these charaters are, no doubt about it.
I'd like to thank you for the hours of pleasure this story provided me. It was great to be back in the realm. I intend to keep this story around and, when the time comes for my son to watch all the episodes of D&D on DVD, including the voiced Requiem, I will let him read this story as the finish to it all. So, then, I guess, upon reflection, the PG-13 thing isn't all that bad. :-)
All the best to you and in your future works.
| HopelessxRomanticx1993 chapter 2 . 12/16/2007
*shocked silence* WHAT? You're kidding! Venger? DUNGEON MASTER? Talk about a nasty shock for Bobby! Ouch... Hopeless out.
| Lady Zoraida chapter 12 . 5/31/2007
I'm sure my beloved Venger could eat those three "evil ones" for breakfast!.And I don't imagine Shadow Demon being so cheeky with Venger..He would have burnt him alive!
| Lady Zoraida chapter 7 . 5/31/2007
Those stupid things are nothing Allan Poe's tales are REALLY romantic
| Lady Zoraida chapter 3 . 5/29/2007
That's fine,but I don't like Venger being good (I've always love him,I mean it).Besides, an unicorn is not a proper steed for him and less the unbearable Uni
| lisa316 chapter 12 . 4/30/2007
I also mentioned this when I took your poll over at LiveJournal, but I really admired the way you were able to write Uni is a way that wasn’t annoying. You were actually able to write her as an *interesting* character. Thank you so much for not having her bleating all the time!
This was absolutely the best “Return to the Realm” story I’ve come across. The interaction between the characters and their children was so fitting. Original characters are challenging in fanfic, but yours were so extremely well developed. I think the best part of the story for me was the father/son dynamic between Eric and John. You dealt with that plot point in so many subtle and effective ways: the rescues, the self-sacrifice, the matching costumes and weapons, the sword that can only be used when they’re together (and I agree, it was nice to see Eric get a sword to go with the shield, however briefly)John learning how much his father really cares and Eric finally realizing what his son needs from him most of all. The relationship felt so real and tied in nicely with the overall plot.
Again, thanks for writing such a wonderful story.
| lisa316 chapter 9 . 4/30/2007
The orcs still haven’t changed the password? Hmm. Well, I guess you’re right: they weren’t known for their intelligence…
The part where John is trapped and thinking he’s going to die is just so sweet and sad and well-written, imagine me staring at my monitor with my mouth hanging open. Then the part where Eric shows up and saves him is so wonderful, imagine me jumping up and down with excitement. Then when I think it can’t get any better, Diana rushes in and they’re both willing to sacrifice themselves for the other, so now imagine me biting my lip and quivering in my chair…Wow, I’m exhausted now. Let’s just sum up by saying that was the best sequence EVER!
| lisa316 chapter 8 . 4/30/2007
His blue eyes burned with a harsh fire as he stared down the shaft of his weapon to the back of his struggling enemy, before raising them to face the thunderstruck Paladin.". . . Daddy? . . . ," Ayesha breathed, barely above a whisper, before screaming, "DADDY!" I absolutely LOVE the way you write Hank rushing to the rescue with arrows blazing. Just like the cartoon; the perfect hero! The fact that he’s rushing to his daughter’s rescue just makes it sweeter.
I adore the banter between Eric and Diana; those two interact so well together, and I love seeing that mirrored between John and Toby. Talk about inherited tendencies! (and lol at the ‘Barney Collection’ joke…)
| lisa316 chapter 5 . 4/30/2007
Varla wrapped her arms tighter around John to hold on as Uni eased down a rocky slope. "He's afraid of his father leaving him like his mother did," she said as though in a trance.
John stiffened, horrified. He looked down, to where Varla's hands were wrapped around his torso, and saw her magic wand glowing. He wriggled to get free of her grasp as he spun around to face her. "Get the heck out of my head!" he wailed. "You were freaky back home, but never this freaky!" – This is actually one of my favorite scenes so far. It’s so easy to imagine John feeling exposed when his fears are said aloud and reacting this way. Somehow the fact that he saves her right after he lashes back makes it even more poignant.
| lisa316 chapter 4 . 4/30/2007
Eric nodded his head in understanding. Then, without another word, he let loose a balled fist and struck Venger across the jaw with as much force as he could muster. – YEA! This was just brilliant! I wasn’t expecting that at all, but at the same time, it I was just waiting for it, if that makes sense…His anger was such an appropriate reaction.