|Reviews for Mortal Kombat Vs DC Universe: Beginnings|
| darkknight uk chapter 1 . 6/23/2008
This story has tremendous potential and I'll try to keep an eye out for it.
If I may share some feedback with you?
* Good sense of imagery. The use of language to illustrate what's happening is mostly effective here.
* Nice sense of foreboding and mystery
* The beginnings of a nice depiction of the Batman / Superman friendship
You may want to consider the following to improve;
* Think about the balance between showing and telling.
* Too much happens too quickly, try to pace these things out to give the reader a sense of location and context before thinking about falling meteorites and citizens in peril.
* The thesaurus. It's the writers best friend. Use it!
All in all, a potentially excellent story here. Keep fighting the good fight.
| KroovyRed chapter 1 . 4/27/2008
I can't wait for the game! This is a great tribute thus far!