|Reviews for Stillness|
| Dragon and Sword Master chapter 1 . 6/26/2008
This is very well done and I agree with other readers and players of this game, you capture the beauty/mysterious nature that is Kaim at the beginning of the game.
A wonderful use of vocabulary and grammar, putting emphasis on the words that just want to have more meaning to them, and the thoughts that his subconscious (assuming subconscious) is asking in the parenthesis...they are very well done.
| Lord 0f Storms chapter 1 . 5/5/2008
wow. what do i say? this captures Kaim's personality and view of his memories perfectly. i was gripped the whole way through, and it made me really empathise with Kaim, despite me not liking him a great deal. some seriously frightening stuff in there, but it fit exactly with his emotions. wow, nice job, you're one hell of a writer!
| Captain Wolf chapter 1 . 4/29/2008
Woah, brilliant story here. I think you captured Kaim's personality pretty well, and that's no easy feat. I kind of have two versions of him: the calm, wise, yet sad version that appears in most of the dreams, and the frustrated, confused, and determined-to-forget-about-the-past version of the 'present'. Obviously I'm referring to the latter.
Anyways, I also must comment on the style of your writing. It's incredibly hard to find something that flows as smooth as this on . And your vocabulary. I know you and I probably don't think of 'eerily', 'pungent', and 'quaint' as elaborate words, but I haven't seen them a lot on here.
I liked how you used italics, bold, and such in the story. Most of the time when authors want to stress or increase the volume of words they put them in all CAPITALS and add bunch of !1?s at the end. Personally, I think italics works better and looks neater, but that's just my preference.
My compliments on this story that is certainly a good addition to the Lost Odyssey section. (*clicks 'favorite story' button*) Later!
| GooooodPie chapter 1 . 4/27/2008
Hello Eternal it's a pleasure to talk to you, well to give you a review. Ok it's good I like it very much it's just like well like I'm playing the game again.
I'm sorry if you missinterperted that in a bad way I'm sorry, I guess you could say that you were able to capture the true essence of what Kaim is. Oh and sorry, but it should be 'Who is she' you've got it right, well actually they might have both worked...
Oh, I'm sorry and I hope you don't mind, but would you mind helping us with a project that we are going to do. We want to write a novelization for Lost Odyssey, it's ok if you don't want to particpate in it, but if you please go to the Fourms section, to Lost Odyssey and find the Fourm labeled 'Sarah's Notebook', once again you don't have to do anything that you don't want to do. Oh incase you don't know a novelization is when we take a game/movie/manga and we put what happens in it on FanFic. Such as I'm doing the last scene of Lost Odyssey, um sorry I'm rambling.
Sorry if you thought that I thought you were stupid with that last comment I'm really sorry! And of course your story is excellent. It's ok if you spam me for being mean Sorry!