I just finished your fanfiction and I loved it. Please finish it

I really enjoyed this story. Sorry to see it abandoned.

Holy Sweet Mother of Mary and Joseph! You're better off just numbering the chapters like Chapter 1 if you can't come up with any decent names.

square root n has nothing to do with the actual fanfic and most people will be like WTF? Unless there is a certain core audience your trying to capture your doing a pretty piss poor job at capturing it.

Did you know Fan has writer forums? Some are better then the others stay away from The Fireplace unless you don't mind kissing ass.

The funny thing by the way is that *legal* immigrants are a lot LESS likely to suck money from the system and are more likely to do something to contribute positively to society no matter how big or small as long as they are not oppressed by regulation after regulation or they will go elsewhere.

Did you know some schools have sack lunch police? If Johnny has something they don't like some schools will give the kid detention. how-to-2/school-tells-parents-sack-lunches-not-allowed-kids-must-eat-whats-served/

Pretty much do it our way or hit the highway kiddo! Imagine the crap Harry would have to go thru in America thru insane regulations often petty just to be like everybody else.

The Dursley's remind me more of rich liberal elites who usually have expensive Apple computers that costs 2,000 dollars or I-phones that suck up minutes like it's going out of style.

What we need is a proper balance between liberals and conservatives as one cannot live without the other.

Try to run a business as a liberal and most fail..because they lack structure. They are good at ideas and pushing away from the *norm* but go all over the place. That's a big NO NO for running a business.

You need a vision and goal to keep a business having an audience and Conservatives are good at that. Liberals are good for presenting unique ideas but you need Conservatives for structure and a sound plan to push the business forward.

Conservatives tend to not *feel* that need to have the latest useless gadget just because it's something shiny or flashy.

Personally I don't care if any of those *freaks* as Petunia would call them are here as long as they are legal and swore the oath.

For some strange reason liberals and the media fail to understand the difference and consequences of legal and illegal. They seem to think both mean the same thing when in fact lawfully they don't.

And expect us to smile by handing tax payers money to the illegal kind to give them free driver's licenses and government smartphones while if we were to go to Mexico we would have to pass their national road test to transfer our US licenses if we become a citizen of Mexico.

This is really well written, the plot and the characters. I love how you portrayed Harry and joined Remus and Sirius into the story. Harrys interactions with all the characters are very interesting. I am heart broken to know that you ended this fanfic so suddenly but, you are a fantastic writer and should keep it up.

Where is the next chapter you said were comming

fantastic fanfiction ! too bad it's discontinued...

You NEED to update this fic. My life depends on it.

Noooooooooooooooo, it can't end now. I like this too much.

Levitation is directly corespondent to the weight of the object.

Color changing would remain constantly easy for most things, but it would be limited by the collective volume of space it takes up, but not including the empty space between particles and such.

Teleportation is obviously apparating.

I think you got Sirius just right. The problem rather lies with your Harry. He isn't the whiny petulant brat that so many authors make, but he really isn't likable either. He's way too harsh on Sirius. Honestly, is it that hard to see someone giving the child to a trusted guardian like Hagrid for a day or two while he pursues the traitor? I don't think that's unreasonable at all. Harry comes across as unreasonably self centered in this case.

Rewriting canon wholesale to suit your story dilutes your original premise, and weakens your characters. A Snape with no love for Lily is a completely different character, a cardboard cutout, and now his actions make no sense beyond 'he's evil'. Also it makes Dumbledore an idiot, rather than a clever manipulator.

It makes me sad to see you cripple your story like that, because, this concept had a lot of potential, and your writing style is enjoyable.

Please please please continue this it's too interesting to quit

Fucking awesome!