|Reviews for Lemsip and Vapour Rub|
| ilovemyboys chapter 7 . 1/22/2011
I love it! Great story!
| AnnaBananaphone chapter 6 . 9/27/2009
Loved it! It's just son interesting. Please continue!
| AnnaBananaphone chapter 4 . 4/21/2009
I love this story! Please continue!
| Evildarkwolf chapter 3 . 12/5/2008
is there going to be more? I hope so.
| LoverFaery chapter 3 . 8/6/2008
Okay, wow. I'm impressed. Poor Remus. Sucky way to live. Glad you're updating still, can't wait to read more shameless fluff. Sirius'll nurse him back to health proper. *wink*
| sleipnirfenris chapter 3 . 8/5/2008
o the calvary! YAY save remus! :P:P more soon? *looks hopeful* :D
| The Grumpy Snail chapter 3 . 8/3/2008
Liked the story, did not like that this chapter had no Remus. I hope you update soon
Another note, I don't really like how Remus keeps calling Sirius "my friend." It seems like a very unnatural way to speak (sorry if that seems nitpicky - I'm just trying to be constructive). All in all, though, good story, and I'm looking forward to another update.
| cherry-s-twin chapter 3 . 8/3/2008
oh i like it! its very much in-character, so bravo! chapter 4? lol take your time *gives cookie*
| Avada Cait-davra chapter 3 . 8/3/2008
i liked this chapter,
although it was a little short.
but i hope that youre just setting the stage for bigger and better things.
cant wait for the next one!
| ferman chapter 2 . 7/15/2008
You should go on with this! Please!
| Avada Cait-davra chapter 2 . 6/30/2008
i really like this.
make more fast!
| Musica Diabolos chapter 2 . 6/16/2008
Finally, a new chapter! Please keep updating, you're a great writer, excellent characterization!
| teh blumchenkinder chapter 1 . 5/11/2008
You've done a good job on using adjectives and complex sentences! Woo! (I mean it. I was getting desperate in this section!)
aggregate: erm... aggravate? check the dictionary for the word you want to use in describing the annoyance of junk in one's breathing apparatuses.
You're either from someplace that uses the Queen's English or very, very thorough. Either way, I approve the use for this sector of fanfic.
"Sirius screwed his face up awkwardly as he entered Remus’ adjoining kitchen, finding it to be significantly lacking."
This is an amazing sentence-type: the kind that is necessary for the story-and you would never miss it unless you knew better. You see, what it does is not only illustrate the scene (rule numero uno: show, don't tell!), it gives us insight into what Sirius is thinking, something very important for this ficlet and scene. It also breaks up Lupin and his talking, making sure the same amount of focus stays on each of them. This is just one example, the best, in this fic. Er... onwards!
I wonder: how much are you going to emphasize "the wolf" aspect? Some people write it like werewolves that are made can either accept or deny their "wolf", and some, like Remus, who deny it, have a much tougher time. Some write that werewolves that are made don't live long after, like a few years at most- and so Remus is a freak like that, and should be dying soon anyway (out of sheer cussedness, or something...) And yet again, some write that it's not simply a switch mechanism, but, like animagi, the wolf-aspect bleeds over into their brain-thought pattern, so some fics have him thinking, consciously or subconsciously, as a wolf: my pack, aggression, submission, prey, that sort of thing- and remember, werewolves "have enhanced senses and abilities..." but some don't write that, choosing to emphasize that Remus is *human*, and only a wolf (some think "regular wolf") once a moon-cycle. (by the by, there are moon calculators on the internet, even as far back as B.C."E", mail me if you want me to point a few out...)
My hope is that you remember this: werewolves are not wolves, and werewolves are not human. I imagine that Remus has better sight, hearing, smell, strength, and agility than humans- when he's feeling up to snuff- and, of course, the cannon that the transformation happens by the full moon rising and setting, whether he's out in it or not, and that it's very painful. But hey, what am I saying? You've probably gleaned cannon-sites for every penny and know what the hell you're on about, right? Right.
I'll quit rambling and go to bed... even though it's like, five thirty am here. Pleh.
| VikitChan chapter 1 . 5/4/2008
oh nice begining :D
| dristi chapter 1 . 5/3/2008
hi, nice beginning. pls update soon