|Reviews for Senju Naruto|
| rasengan86 chapter 2 . 5/7/2008
The concept of Tsunade being Naruto's real mother is one that is seldomly explored. It had a lot of interesting possibilities. Your story is in it's early stages so I don't quite think I can give an in depth opinion...but everything seems fine so far.
I can point out a few things however. First of all when Tsunade was talking about not bringing Naruto back until he was Chuunin level or Sannin level or whatever: that method of quantifying power and/or skill is a fanon concept that is entirely inaccurate. Shinobi rank in no way has to be an overall indicator of skill, it is just a military rank. After all most opponents Naruto has faced were all above him in rank & he defeated most of them: Mizuki was a Chuunin & Kabuto is second in command of all of Oto (most likely a jounin). Another way to look at it is using the example of a Karate student, would you say things like he posseses blue belt level speed & mib brown belt level kicks? This isn't Dragonball Z so everyone does not have a power ranking.
Also beware of sticking too close to canon. I think we are all sick of seeing Kakshi's bell test, followed by the Wave Mission, the Chuunin Exam & then the invasion. Put him on a different team, have them not participate in the Chuunin Exam...just do something so that it does not feel that we are simply re-reading canon with a stronger Naruto.
Remember Naruto is a jinchuuriki. He can't be a med nin & he can't learn Tsunade's strength technique seeing as he will never posess the appropriate chakra control. ALso be sure to do more than just make Naruto stronger, since Naruto is growing up different he should be a different person. And be sure to change Naruto's relationships with the other character's accordingly. Sarutobi can't be his grandfather figure if he doesn't grow up in Konoha to form that bond, things like that.
Naruto being of the Senju clan holds some very interesting possiblities, especially since you are implying that he will manifest some of the abilities of the Shodaime. But remember, I think that Yamato has proved that the ability to supress the bijuu is linked to Mokuton. I will be especially interested in seeing how Madara will react if Naruto starts showing the abilities of the only man he called his equal.
As far as needing help with the story, I consider myself pretty knowledgeable as far as Naruto goes and I am pretty good with grammar...so I can help there, just looking over things.
| Peachcandy chapter 2 . 5/7/2008
Pff lol... Tsunade and her crankyness
| SALittle chapter 1 . 5/7/2008
You should have more reviews in my opinion, but I suppose people are just lazy (Like I am normally). For the sake of every good, do not make this story yaoi, side pairing or not. Hell, it doesn't even NEED a pairing; it is very enjoyable as is.
As it is, I couldn't find one spelling error. A few minor punctuation errors, but nothing someone that isn’t REALLY looking for is going to find.
All and all, good stuff 9.5/10 thus far (-.5 for even thinking of yaoi _)
| Blacksword Zero chapter 2 . 5/7/2008
I really like your story.
| bashking chapter 1 . 5/3/2008
like it so far looking forward to the next chapter
| Blacksword Zero chapter 1 . 5/3/2008
Intersting;I can't wait the next chapter,please update!