|Reviews for Becoming One|
| nayin17 chapter 1 . 10/25/2013
| BooksAreMyWorld chapter 1 . 2/16/2013
Nice story, it was very tastefully done, sweet and realistic. I find that most stories like this are all vulgar and overly smutty and not as genuine as they should be. I think you captured the emotions well.
| A Dozen Lemmings chapter 1 . 2/1/2012
It was very well done but the ending was tacky as hell and just felt awkward.
| Thirst4light chapter 1 . 10/4/2011
You captured the emotion perfectly.I agree with you completely when writers go overboard with M rated up the good work.
| Epeefencer chapter 1 . 6/13/2011
Fairly well done. The only small criticism I have is that you have a few problems with some of your tenses. His instead of him and their instead of them, in a few places. Otherwise I think you did a wonderful job with the story and conveyed Harry's and Ginny's emotions quite well.
To me this doesn't rate an M rating, you probably could have gotten away with a T rating as you really don't get graphic at all with your description of their love making.
I hope you continue and produce more of these type of stories with Harry and Ginny. They are the perfect couple as far as I am concerned.
Thanks for thaking the time to share it with us here on FanFiction.
| Becky D Studio chapter 1 . 11/21/2010
aww that we so sweet :)
| Stephanie O chapter 1 . 11/3/2010
This was a great story, and I thought you did a good job of keeping them true to character. I also didn't miss the slang words during their lovemaking either! (I think it's pretty hard to believe when reading Harry & Ginny and they start saying crude slang words during a love scene...almost like they're trying to make it like porn or something.) There are some errors/typos that are rather difficult to overlook, however: 'fifth teen minute's' (fifteen minutes), '...plate's form [plates from] the table outside...', 'his self' should be HIMSELF, and 'their self' should be themselves. (I'm sorry if I seem overly picky, but those last two are doozies!) ;-) Nice job, and thanks for writing! :)
| GNatGirl13 chapter 1 . 12/26/2009
Very tastefully done. I liked it.
| Amaq Iraluq chapter 1 . 11/28/2009
Wonderfully written. Extremely classy and tasteful. Well done!
| Siriusmunchkin chapter 1 . 11/24/2009
Beautiful and tasteful.
| peppermay22 chapter 1 . 8/19/2009
Great! Loved it
| csubjman chapter 1 . 7/28/2009
This was the first M rated story i have read and i have to say that i really enjoyed it. It was in no way vulgar but instead very cute and romantic. Great job
| ronsbabiesmomma chapter 1 . 7/12/2009
perhaps i missed it but.. who was "he" when they were talking about him not being there and such. it sounded like a death? i'm not sure how canon this is either. just wondering who that was. my guess is the twin that died? i always forget which one.
don't mistake this for a flame. i loved the story
| Nutmeg44 chapter 1 . 6/20/2009
i love the story. i like the fact that there isnt crude language to describe everything. JK would be proud. i'd love to see Ginny's 7th year after she gets the promise ring from Harry. to see what happens during the holidays and how ppl relate to her with a Harry ring on her finger.
| Parvati48 chapter 1 . 6/1/2009
I always like Harry/Ginny stories, they are my favorite. You did a pretty good job.