|Reviews for White Rain|
| hymnia chapter 25 . 3/6
I wish I could give you more feedback, but I'm swamped with schoolwork right now. I'm still reading and so glad you are seeing this story through to the end. Great chapter!
| Inner Self chapter 24 . 3/6
Yukio's mother was right. Irony seems to be a popular literary device. Too popular. But, honestly, kid was super hot-headed. If he dies, it is the expected.
| topsilog00 chapter 25 . 3/4
oh wow. so much emotion right now. sasuke and sakura and their baby. i want, no, i NEED to see a happy ending with them - there arent many stories like this and i wish it never ends! and also sasuke and itachi and rina and how they come together and wow just so much arghhhhh update sooon! please!
| iampermanent chapter 25 . 3/3
I feel a yukio/rina vibe going on. Oh you sly, sly bastard.. nah, you're great. Great job!
| Elspeth chapter 25 . 2/26
Who needs an army when you have a myriad of Narutos? Nice!
Good to see Kaia sparking a revolt against the repulsive Marnix and getting in some kicks of her own. And naturally, Sasuke was both a welcome avenger/rescuer and a danger to everyone around him. It does seem to go hand in hand with him. Nice moment with his niece, though.
I am looking forward to a happy ending (or something like it).
| Elspeth chapter 24 . 2/26
What a chapter. Amazing. Under all the frantic action, what really hit me was the tragedy of all these children fighting and killing each other.
| Inner Self chapter 21 . 2/24
Sasuke: It's a review. It's a review. It's a... GOD, SASUKE, COULD YOU BE ANY MORE CREATIVE?! Good job. Way to give Lucia sweet dreams.
| Inner Self chapter 17 . 2/24
Fuck yeah! Make Rina awesome!
| Lucii chapter 21 . 2/23
Please update right nooooooow!
| Inner Self chapter 16 . 2/23
By the way, all this drama about Itachi Jr.'s mother is either a red herring or completely justifiable otherwise I quit reading.
P.S. You might try making a short story about that cabin and the sadist and the masochist. That story could be turned completely into your own, I think. You would develop a new world or incorporate it into the one we live in. WWII stories are popular.
| Duncan0Idaho chapter 25 . 2/23
White rain is a fic i am very wary enough, despite your claim of being a pro writer Oc's are something that i feel that need to be handled with care, lots of it, as i've seen OC's turn into sues, Sasuke's angst gets tiring at times, i can understand if he thinks the clan is cursed, an other problem is that Sasu Saku here seems either a bit forced and borderline abusive in my opinion (Sasuke blowing off at sakura at least thrice is not a positive sign)
Regarding the Oc's Lucia, Itachi and Rina i am not exactly comfortable reading them, you have left all their background as a big incognita, not only that but ria seems to be a bit borderline on the Sue, sure she watched Sasuke use the chidori a lot but to the point where the can reverse engineer it? to the point where she can replicate the hand signs?
As far as the Leaf versus grass Arc was a bit troubled, Lucia and these other OC's dint exactly flowed very well, they are like we have money so screw the rules and that is only their mayor trait i can notice, aside being filthy rich and evil, you exposed some of their ways before and it's still evil, i dunno i think the resolution was a bit anti climatic, there is this moment when it seems a massive battle is going to break out but then they surrender, it clashes with had been said before that grass was mostly corrupted, if they were surrendering was the last thing they would have done, it was too smooth.
Otherwise you have crafted an interesting piece of literature here.
| Inner Self chapter 6 . 2/22
Aw, how cute. Itachi is in Sasuke's shoes.
| kwak73 chapter 25 . 2/21
Great finish to an amazing story, now you just have to rap it all up. Looking forward to your next chapter.
| Inner Self chapter 4 . 2/21
I enjoyed the parts about mini-Itachi. It's weird, but with Itachi "dead"/dead I hope the story will center on him. (I was hoping for Sakura x Itachi but now I'm just focused on the next gen aspect, seeing as that ain't happening.) Oh, and if Itachi's going to get the sharingan, so should Rina. Just let the girl have crazy sharingan powers, too, ne? Otherwise I will be reminded of all the female saiyans who never went supersaiyan and all the uchiha women who were never known for developing the sharingan. sigh. i hate chauvanistic writers.
P.S. If itachi is alive, i can see him with that pretty, demure mademoiselle. just write it, and write it well :)
| Inner Self chapter 1 . 2/20
Hooray for creativity!