Reviews for Michael's Chair
Guest chapter 1 . 5/4/2014
Great story..until the end! Such detail before, then...practically nothing! Really bad ending..you fizzled...badly!
hayley chapter 1 . 3/18/2013
love it cant believe it doesnt have more reviews gave me goosebumps
clerical medical chapter 1 . 12/6/2012
Super-creepy, thank you!
June Odyssey chapter 1 . 12/19/2011
I was confused by the ending, but enjoyed the rest of the story :)
sheppardlover928 chapter 1 . 7/4/2011
Wait! Did I miss a whole section of story-after John activates the Chair for his rescue? I want to know how they got John out of the chair and I surely miss the comfort he so surely deserved! Great story-major whump-but I feel cheated-Definitely a lame ending-like you gave up!
sagey chapter 1 . 8/24/2010
now that is definitely something I could see michael doing..real creepy..thanks..

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lizlou57 chapter 1 . 8/23/2010
Greatstory! Some serious Sheppard whump here! Loved the descriptions of Michael's creepy interface. Good to see Sheppard battling to cope with what is happening to him. BUT the ending was way too short! And assuming the last paragraph was some time after he had recovered, I can't believe rodney would be so callous -having seen John in that state! Or was it all a bad dream?
Kazbaby chapter 1 . 4/30/2010
Great story but I wish it was longer, (please don't kill me for saying this) the resolution went by way too quickly.
LordxXxofxXxDorkness chapter 1 . 4/26/2010
I love the way it's writen, Hun. The haulting sentances makes for a much more dramatic read. Good job.
Alice3 chapter 1 . 11/2/2009
Wow, you really know how to whump Shep. I liked your disjointed style, it put me into his head space at the time. Very nice. Although, I admit, the ending confused me. Did he die? Was it a hallucination? Was it a happy ending?
Principessa Di Morte chapter 1 . 10/10/2009
Wow. Ended really quickly there. But it's nice to know they didn't die! It seemed like John and Rodney were kind of ... distant. Like, I think that they are closer than that and there characters weren't quite spot on. But excellent writing nonetheless! Overall, great story.
Sterenyk Strey chapter 1 . 8/1/2009
On a Shep whumpy fan fic reread, and I realise I hadn't commented on this one. My bad. Anyway - absolutely ingenious! Loved it. Great whump and excellent storyline. I would pad out the last para a tad. Just a thought. Hope you don't mind. :-D
Curiosity's Principle chapter 1 . 6/12/2009
Wow! This was a great story! Sad and creepy, but awesome. There were some grammatical problems and sometimes your sentences were overly choppy which sometimes made it difficult to tell what was going on, but dude, this was a very well thought out story. You described that chair and the chair/tubes/interface thing with eerily vivid details. And you wrote the characters very well, their thoughts and actions and reactions, etc. Very nice! I thought the ending was too abrupt though. There definitely should have been a few more paragraphs dealing with his recovery or even just escaping.

But like I said, overall really good story. I like the game that Sheppard kept going in his head and the importance you gave to the dog tags. Very clever. I liked how you had Michael torturing Sheppard and yet showed that he was not completely without a sense of compassion. I guess that could be chalked up to not wanting his 'machine' to break down on him. Even on the show, though, you could see... He was evil, hands down, but there also always seemed to be a sadness about him. Being shunned and betrayed by your own people and also by the people who turned you into what you are can do that to you I suppose. Anyway, I'll be quiet now. Cheers, mate! _
neptune60 chapter 1 . 1/31/2009
I really enjoyed this and loved Sheppards reaction. He's shown too many times as being super human and never really being afraid. This was very realistic and I really felt for him, but it all ended too abruptly. I expected to click onto chapter 2 and therefore it was a bit anti climatic. I would have liked a little more time spent on getting him out and his recovery time. I was beginning to think that it never happened and it was some sort of hallunication. But other than that an excellent whump story.
T'Pring chapter 1 . 7/28/2008
Lovely whump and great Sheppard strength of character. I thought your characterizations were spot on.

If I were to make a critical comment (as in critique ;-) I would say that the end felt a bit abrupt. You kindof split your big climax moment between sending the message and turning on the chair that one last time. For future storytelling, consider throwing all the eggs in one basket and making all the problems whack your protag at once. Makes for nice tension, and a nail biting climax! And I only mention because you asked, and because there's great potential here! Please ignore if you wish.

That little comment aside, I loved how you kept the theme throughout of playing the game, and the nice bit with the dog tags. Yummy stuff! Nicely done.

t'pring
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