|Reviews for Aucune Defense Pour Toi|
| Ibbly5 chapter 8 . 2/22
this is gr8
| Guest chapter 5 . 1/30
WTF, was she thinking kissing her in the hallway in front of everybody? This could be a huge step.
| Guest chapter 4 . 1/30
Yes, maybe there's hope for them afterall.
| Guest chapter 2 . 1/30
Looks like she's suspicious.
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/30
What a brilliant start. Can't wait see where this story goes.
| SkinnyLatte chapter 1 . 2/1
This story is so great! I like many others have now read it beginning to end at least three times.
The characterisation is perfect, fleur is gorgeous and yes self sacrificing but I don't think the story would be half as memorable is she wasn't.
I loved all of the chapters but for me the first few where fleur is desperate for any sign of hermione returning her affections is perfect!
Write another story please :)
| HIJKay chapter 37 . 1/28
God, I love this story. I just read the fic in one day... and this is my third time doing so. your writing style is captivating. fleur is absolutely impossible. sometimes, I want to smack the both of them.
please, do not pay ryk any attention. a story that's rated m doesn't automatically mean there will be sex in each chapter. it's mature themes. I feel as though fleur going to through such a delicate and unusual ritual calls for such a rating. the father's reaction was real and true. he did not care about gender, but fleur's authority over hermione. hell, in some states in the US fleur would have been added to the sex offender registry. what she did was not a light matter. not wrong, but one could completely understand his shock as the parent of a seventeen years old girl.
the progression between the two lovers felt as natural as breathing. more often than not, people start the journey in medias res and it feels forced. the characters aren't real and go from one chapter of being strangers, to the next being in love and shagging.
it's obvious how much time, thought, and effort that was put into this story. I only wish it could be published as a book. I do hope one day you write and publish work with your own characters in your own world.
| RykOakwine chapter 32 . 1/23
And, the straw that broke the camels back.
Hermoine's parents, introduced in the worst possible way, invading a professors quarters at Hogwarts, when we've never seen muggles allowed anywhere near the school, much less into professors quarters at 4 am. Li, e McGonagal forgot there are 100 plus house elves at tne school who can find amd deliver a message tk Hermoine?
Ridiculous, then Hermoine parents being assholes, especially the father, when shes just a few months shy of 18? She's already an adult in wizarding society and over the age of consent in muggle society.
and her dad is playing this hardcore protective father crap and it's just more contrived melodrama, with genuine 19th century sensibilities all around. Forcing Fleur to sleep there in their home, its just one contrived, melodramatic, scenario after another.
This isnt an M rated romance, this is soap opera by way of Jane Austen and still rated G.
| RykOakwine chapter 28 . 1/23
listening to fleur talk about the "hellish" and "intense" competition of the tri-wizard tournament makes me wonder if I read the wrong book.
Cause the tournament I recall had one event in which the Champions didn't even work against each other but instead against a dragon, then NOTHING for MONTHS. Then they had a one hour event swimming in the lake to rescue someone, then MONTHS with nothing, then an afternoon in a hedge maze with moderately dangerous creatures in it.
Seriously, Fleur? Hyperbole much? There was so little to the actual Tri-Wizard tournament that it boggles the mind that they canceled the quidditch season (so sorry all you 7th years, no quidditch for you any more!) or that they brought dozens from Durmstrang and Beauxbatons for the whole school year when a port key for the champions and headmaster/mistress for the days of the three whole events would have more than sufficed.
Listening to Fleur go on about the rigors of the competition itself is just silly.
| RykOakwine chapter 26 . 1/23
Bit frustrating too that Fleur keeps referring to Hermoine as her "lover" when that's hardly an accurate word to describe their relationship after 27 chapters. They sleep together sure, but they onlu actually SLEEP in bed together. Fully clothed, from all we're told.
This is like reading a 19th century English romance, the sort that the french laughed at and mocked for years as representative of the prudish conservative "lights off missionary position only" sexuality of the Brits (and America, the British former colony established by people too sexually repressed and conservative for even the BRITISH to tolerate).
I'd have never, in a million years, pictured Fleur Delacour's sexuality to be this... boring. There's just no heat at all to their relationship. It's all fondness and kisses and now, when it should be evolved to happy sex between them, instead we're getting more Fleur Moe Disease.
Fragile female sexuality? It really IS like a Jane Austen novel!
| RykOakwine chapter 25 . 1/23
Gah, this story is frustrating.
After 20 something chapters and 100,000 plus words, I've been able to determine some things about female sexuality that I wasn't clear on.
Appearantly, 20 year old and 17 year old women in love spend their days and nights kissing but no further. Relationships are about... well, it's hard to tell what they are about, exactly but in spite of this chapter finally at least mentioning sex, relationships between a 20 year old and a 17 year old lesbian are completely not abojt sex, since we've 20 chapters of a truly Rated G romance so far.
Which is part of the frustration as a reader, since this story is rated equivalent to Rated R, yet it has been 100,000 words of Disney level Rated G romance.
I assume that the author is far more familiar with female sexuality and the needs and desires of women in relationships than I am, since there is no way I'd have ever guessed that after some weeks or months of being "together" that neither of the girls seem to ever actually get horny for the other. That 17 and 10 year old women in love don't ever even masturbate due to physical needs. That neither of them seems to actually desire the other in a lusty, physical, way, but instead the sex part is part of some vaguely anticipated future evolution of the relationship, no doubt part of some super secret "ritual sealing" which keeps getting mentioned yet never defined.
No wonder McGonagal is okay with this relationship, so far its puritanical enough to satisfy even that prudish old woman!
Gah. I hope this isn't really an accurate reflection of female sexuality and what it's really like in a romance between two young women. Because if it is, I'd feel pretty badly for all the actual sex I recall hqving between the ages of 17 and 20 with various young women.
Just... neither of them even get horny enough to go fap one off in the bath? ? Really?
| Balthanon chapter 37 . 1/19
Like many other reviewers, this story caught my attention and kept it through approximately two days of reading. I enjoyed Dreiser's original fic (it was what led me here originally), but this took a step beyond and really enhanced and expanded upon the story.
In my own perception of the Harry Pottery universe, this is now the definitive Fleur without a doubt.
I will say that like another reviewer, I actually got the feeling that this was a "post-Voldemort" fic while reading and to some extent I actually think that might work a little better (where it was ended 6th year, rather than 7th perhaps) or perhaps there was activity going on during the story that overlapped. However, if a sequel ever manifested that drew on an expansion of the war that wouldn't impede my enjoyment in the least.
| SL chapter 37 . 1/14
I am torn: on the one hand I find the story to be quite powerful emotionally, in that I am infuriated with Fleur's to-the-bitter-end avoidance and selfish self-sacrifice, repeatedly from the beginning (avoiding for 3 years) to the very end (setting barriers). On the other hand, I feel that at times I am too infuriated so I am torn about how much I enjoy the story.
All in all, definitely a powerful story. Thanks!
| sherzael25 chapter 1 . 1/8
sweet and beautifully written.. I can't almost put it down when i started reading it. :DDD 3
| sgtranglin chapter 37 . 12/24/2013
Damn what a great and amazing story, needless to say that i completely love this and has taken me quite a while to read due to stop, starting but this is truly an amazing story and your writing is amazing as well and very good.