Reviews for Just A Step Ahead
thespeedylizard chapter 9 . 5/14/2014
awesome story! I decided to re-visit the world of tin man fandom and stumbled upon this fic this morning, and couldn't stop reading! it's really great, very well-written with convincing character development. thanks :)
Rael Ellan chapter 9 . 7/27/2013
This is fantastic! Utter brilliance. Great writing style, everyone's wonderfully in character (even Zero, despite his distinct lack of actual bodily harm to Cain) and your narrative pacing is perfect. Thank you for sharing this, even if this thanks comes... Oh... Five years late.
catt.brenton chapter 9 . 7/12/2013
Excellent. You did a wonderful job of filling in the back ground story's of Ambrose and Glitch. The idea that Ambrose is now sort of a split personality is intriguing. At least they are in agreement as to how life will go on for them. I thoroughly enjoyed this story and am sad to see it end. I suppose I'll just have to go over to LJ and find the continuation fic. Thank you for writing this and for sharing it with all of us on .
catt.brenton chapter 5 . 7/11/2013
Well, I know I said I would wait for the end of the story to post another review but I loved this chapter so much I had to comment on it. I like the idea that Zero and Ambrose have a past. It is my hope that there might be salvation for Zero in your story. Oh, I have another language suggestion. I'm sorry, I can't help it. I must have been an English teacher in a previous life. lol When writing a sentence such as this one...'both her and Raw seated in front of the fire' you should always remove the second person to see if you should use 'she' or 'her'. Her was seated in front of the fire' or 'she was seated in front of the fire' and then add the second person back in. 'She and Raw were seated in front of the fire.' This works with things like I or me too. Cain and I were eating lunch. The lunch was served by me and Cain. See? I hope you forgive my poking at the small stuff. I just can't seem to help myself. I love the story so far though and look forward to finishing it. Now I have to go to work. :(
catt.brenton chapter 4 . 7/10/2013
I'm thoroughly enjoying your story so far but I wished to make a small comment on the language of your characters. Without going to your page to check I would hazard a guess that you are under the age of 30 and an American. I too am American btw but much older. As a young American you probably don't realize that you don't speak English. When writing dialogue for the royals, including Ambrose, please consider that they would not use American slang. For instance, 'Yeah, thanks.' would be, 'Yes, thank you.' Beyond this small thing, your story line is well written and quite entertaining. So back to it I go. I'll post another review when I'm finished. Thank you ever so much for sharing your story.
Umino Akiko chapter 9 . 12/9/2010
(Hurrah! Happy ending is happy) And you are redundant. (Yes I am!) To the sequal? (To the sequal!)
Umino Akiko chapter 6 . 12/9/2010
(God damnit! Now I can't hate Zero! I was so annoyed when I found out he was still around but now I just wanna snuggle him!) I think I'm going to have to keep him. (See? You even made her like him! And she's the logical one.) Everybody deserves a second chance.
arosynose chapter 9 . 8/23/2008
0_0 OmigodyoukilledGlitchGAH! TT_TT Such a sad, bittersweet ending...
Glitchie chapter 9 . 8/9/2008
Aww, that was good. I really liked Ambrose and Glitch negotiating.
Glitchie chapter 8 . 8/9/2008
Oh, I love the look into Ambrose and Glitch's mind. That was great. I am sad that their plan didn't work and they were captured, but I hope that Ambrose can turn things around.
Glitchie chapter 7 . 8/9/2008
HAHAHA I love the whole throne room battle. I can just imagine Wyatt being so frustrated and annoyed with himself for not realizing what was going on that he'd want to deal with it as soon as possible and all the interruptions just annoying the hell out of him. *snicker* That was great!
Glitchie chapter 6 . 8/9/2008
Hmm... Ambrose and Zero, huh? Well, I doubt Wyatt would like that very much.
Glitchie chapter 5 . 8/8/2008
Yay! Wyatt went back and LOL I love how Ambrose puts them in their place. Have to wonder what is going on with him though.
Glitchie chapter 4 . 8/8/2008
Guh! *Jaw drop* They left Ambrose! They're all a bunch of punks! I love the later conversation with Ambrose and Zero though, it was hilarious!
Glitchie chapter 3 . 8/8/2008
Oo, well I don't blame DG one bit, but Ambrose HAS to go after them!
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