|Reviews for The wonder years|
| Arw165 chapter 31 . 1/29
I will start with: I like this fic in general. Now...
I found the story easy to read as far as 2/3 of its length, then it started feeling too stretched. IMO the biggest vice is a big number of sub-plots. I will admit, that I had not too much of a problem reading about KibaIno or ShikaTema to some extent, but was skipping any scenes solely about them. Maybe it's just me, I honestly don't care much about other pairings usually. Apart from romance though... it feels like we have many threads you only touch upon every few chapters. Especially about Itachi, Sakura, the band, Gaara and Orochimaru. It's as if there's nothing happening with them for days or weeks. I thought Orochimaru was dangerous and much more impatient than this. I get he got warned by Itachi, but he's hardly there in the last chapters. Which makes him much less attractive villain, comparing to the beginning ("maybe he wasn't that much of a threat after all"). Writing few sentences about them every 7K-10K is not enough. It's picking the easier way - tackling them almost one at the time (that's what it feels to me, at least). Maybe you should have kept the story simpler, now we have Sakura in love problem to solve, Sai, weird Gaara, who is ALSO attracted to Naruto etc (feel non-conish potential here, whatever you planned to do with it).
Btw, I somehow hoped Naruto's past would be touch upon. Why otherwise make is so serious and dramatic? For now it doesn't seem important at all to plot or Naruto's life, even though Jiraiya mentioned Naruto might be somehow important because of that.
I don't really want to discuss the romance part. I want happy SasuNaru, as far I as see no one is really perfect there. Naruto isn't for sure. I don't like him leading Neji on, but that doesn't mean I like Neji either. His personality's nasty, he feels superior to everybody. No matter how much he says he appreciates Naruto, I can't believe he finds him his equal. He hates his friends, he finds Naruto's taste in movies poor etc. I think the biggest mistake of Sasuke was not cheating, but lying. Since he wasn't with Oro for kicks (1. drug addiction, 2. worried about Naruto's safety), he should have gone clear about everything much earlier. I'm sure Sai being blonde's replacement is going to be complicate things between the two in a future.
I'm sorry if that review feels like criticism only, but I feel enthusiastic about this story overall and would like it very much to read another chapters, if you ever decide to upload. I'm following just in case.
| OrangeJellyfish chapter 21 . 10/17/2015
Damn it Sasuke! Y u gotta ruin the buzz!?
| OrangeJellyfish chapter 20 . 10/16/2015
| OrangeJellyfish chapter 19 . 10/16/2015
Aww yyeeeahh smexy time! ;)
| OrangeJellyfish chapter 17 . 10/16/2015
No u dumbass! I thought u were an Uchiha? Uchihas don't give in! Even if u have already... Afew times...
| OrangeJellyfish chapter 16 . 10/15/2015
Finally! Damn took u guys long enough!
| OrangeJellyfish chapter 8 . 10/14/2015
Damn right that wasn't the only issue!
| OrangeJellyfish chapter 6 . 10/14/2015
No Naru-chan's in trouble! :(
| AnimangaLoverFE chapter 31 . 7/22/2014
i really love this story...the plot although a little dark and complicated is really interesting and exactly my taste...the characters' personalities and actions are really well-thought too...also,the way you write ,along with your vocabulary and grammar are excellent...i really like the fact that each chapter was long too...i believe sasuke and naruto belong together and i really want them to let go of their past and reach their happy ending along with the rest of the the characters...all in all,i really want to know what happens next so please continue the story and upload the next chapter soon...
| cary99 chapter 1 . 12/30/2013
| Hi chapter 31 . 12/15/2013
Please update omg
| Ooey-Gooey Senpai chapter 31 . 10/17/2013
I absolutely loooovvee this story! Please please pleeeaaaassee update soon!
| kikiluv5 chapter 31 . 10/9/2013
when will you be writing the next chapter? i love this story! 3 3
| tyfgvbj chapter 31 . 10/6/2013
great development, update again soon! :)
| CobrasFate chapter 31 . 9/30/2013
Cant wait for more!