|Reviews for Operation Phoenix: Affecting the Present|
| PSG1JOHN chapter 2 . 1/7/2011
I had lots of fun reading this story with the changing time line and i hope you restart this.
I wonder what will happen lol
| White Stone Woman chapter 2 . 5/12/2008
good cliff hanger. make me come back for more.
my favorite part was how Sarah described her knight, and what his accessories were.
there were a few punctuations missing... and a few incomplete sentences... or are those ok, cuz it is your personal style? this is the first that I've read this genre.
:) looking forward to the next episode.
| benjammindeth chapter 1 . 5/11/2008
Is Charley on the run with the Connors? Also, I like this AU, please keep it going!
| Spidey2 chapter 1 . 5/7/2008
keep going! loved it!...
| White Stone Woman chapter 1 . 5/6/2008
Good. I could feel the bonding between Charlie, and John.
I traveled along with Sarah's feelings in the paragraph about the first man that she had loved since Kyle.
It was very believable that a teenaged boy would not neccessarily spill all the beans about the first meeting of a girl. but I wanted to hear what John was thinking about Cameron, if that is posible in the tv format, maybe.
I liked the weaving in of fragments of dreams for everybody.
where to improve: find a few more words to describe color draining from the face. white was used alot.
I liked ending the story with a chuckle.