Reviews for DJ Bella
Nehnah14 chapter 25 . 8/14/2011
Spelling, grammer and punctuation needs some work.

Character development also needs work.

It was a bit hard to follow in places and extremely confusing to read.

There wasn't a lot of detail on her time spent away and on what Edward did in those six years. I would have liked to read about how he dealt with being apart from her. Did he date? Did he pine after her? Did he think of her ever? Did she? Did he ever try to find her? What exactly happened to make Emmett and Jasper hate him? What exactly did Lauren spew to make them hate him? Did they fight? etc, etc, etc...

A good plotline, but the delivery failed in the end. Maybe consider doing a rewrite to improve?

Having said all that, I did like the story and the happy ending.
NannaRahRah chapter 2 . 10/22/2010
love this story
zeina1 chapter 1 . 9/5/2010
i like the story but u should make the chapters longer!
abbie.loves.twilight chapter 26 . 7/19/2010
Yeah, spelling and grammar have definitely improved.

Great story. A bit hard to follow in places though. It probably needed more character development.

A cute story.
abbie.loves.twilight chapter 2 . 7/19/2010
There are still heaps of typos and I don't get the paragraphing but I love the plot so far. I just think it needs a rewrite.
abbie.loves.twilight chapter 1 . 7/19/2010
Decent first chap. Needs some editing and formatting but it's good overall. Perhaps it should have been longer though...

I would suggest getting a beta.
Twilight-lover-Bby chapter 26 . 4/16/2010
hey i love love love your story its so good :) i want to write one but i dont know were to start and i dont want to write it and have people not like it :( but i think that is such a great idea :)
Bella Marie Cullen 213 chapter 2 . 9/19/2009
ekk this is going to be cool
Bella Marie Cullen 213 chapter 1 . 9/19/2009
ekk this is going to be cool
GOLDENEYESALLTHEWAY222 chapter 25 . 8/28/2009
update soon unless you decided to end it here and make a sequal?
GOLDENEYESALLTHEWAY222 chapter 9 . 8/28/2009
your chapters need to be way longer but other than that i love it!
high-off-skittles-XP chapter 25 . 7/24/2009
YEAY!:) that was a great story! I can't wait to check out your other ones.

l8r g8r

~high~off~skittles~XP~
lovethemall chapter 3 . 6/23/2009
kiss your brain for me!
Writing-Rabbit's-Wreakage chapter 16 . 4/24/2009
YOU DATED JESUS!
NoLongerWritingFF chapter 1 . 11/26/2008
interesting.
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