Reviews for Broken Heartbeat
RedHann chapter 1 . 3/19/2010
this is so sad. I am crying so hard right now! I feel so bad for Bella! You are a great author!
purelyromantic chapter 1 . 7/28/2009
so sad! New Moon is my favourite book because it's so raw and everything is laid bare. Both of them are so vulnerable and only then do they realize how much they need each other.

This was so sad and you captured Bella's broken heart perfectly I thought!

Good job!


tears will fall chapter 1 . 3/2/2009
now this is what i call telent

your amazing:)


btw read my story and tell me what you think

i need ideas help!
CassiexLynn chapter 1 . 7/30/2008
Wow. This is so deep, and so amazing, and so realistic.

Descriptions? Absolutely amazing.

The whole thing is so insightful.

No constructive criticism here. This is absolutely wow.
BabelFish42 chapter 1 . 7/20/2008
*wipes eyes* Wow. For something so short, that was very moving. I loved the image of Bella reaching out the window. So heartbreaking, yet beautifully written. This is probably one of the best Bella-after-Edward-leaves scenes I've ever read. Excellent job.
Blood on a Rose chapter 1 . 6/11/2008
*sob sob* That could seriously be an outtake from New Moon. I can see why you entered that one into Ramblings and Thoughts. It explained everything that Bella must've been feeling those first few days and weeks when she tried to not dwell on the fact that Edward was really gone. It's terrible, but amazing at the same time, you know what I mean?
lollizuu chapter 1 . 6/3/2008
Oh! That was really good, but it was sad. Now I am sad. I want to read New Moon again. Well, anyway. Magnificent!
KneelingGlory chapter 1 . 5/21/2008
Well, that totally just made my night. I love angst, and no one does it better than Bella and Edward. You totally get that. The image of her reaching out into the night for someone she knows isn't going to be there...ugh, my heartstrings!

xXxBANDxGEEKxXx chapter 1 . 5/10/2008
That was so sad, but I LOVED it!
Epitome of Randomness chapter 1 . 5/10/2008
Absolutely perfect. I loved it.
musically inclined chapter 1 . 5/9/2008
That was depressing. Good story though.

Musically Inclined
cocorocks111 chapter 1 . 5/9/2008
This was very well-written. I liked it a lot, and how you make it seem that he is there in a way, just unseen:)

Julsgracie chapter 1 . 5/9/2008
Wow. THat was great. I love how she's reaching for him... you should keep going.
Angeliss chapter 1 . 5/9/2008
Hey... I just wanted to say I really like your title. XD

Not only that, but this littel oneshot of yours has merited the jealously guarded award of being added to my faves. You earned it.

It's beautiful, amazing, heartrending... I look forward to whatever you put out there. You get creative writing. It isn't something that can be taught, although you can gain it, like perspective, and improve it like any talent. You, my dear, are a writer. A much better writer than I was at your age. I'm not being patronizing, after all, I'm not that much older than you. But still. I could not write something like this while I was in highschool.

This is one of the best oneshots I have ever seen, and I've seen a few. Very few people can get dry-eyed me to tear up in two pages' worth of writing. And you did, even before I went over it. I take no responsibility. This was all you.

One little question... Does the creaking floorboard that Bella collapses on at the end happen to be the same floorboard hiding Edward's things? What dramatic irony.
Permanent Rose chapter 1 . 5/9/2008
So sad, but very well written