|Reviews for Expulsion from Oz|
| abbyweyr chapter 1 . 10/20/2012
better Jacob than Jasper already mated. A little confusing with all the asides.
| orangemice311 chapter 1 . 5/22/2008
That was absolutely amazing. I feel so insignificant now... I loved it. Please continue!
| Hibella chapter 1 . 5/11/2008
This is good as a one shot but it's a bit confusing. A lot of the descriptions sound like Jasper instead of Edward. Did I miss something?
| knblas chapter 1 . 5/11/2008
Wow! That was amazing! I love the darkness and the mystery of it.
| HumbugGirl chapter 1 . 5/11/2008
"His lips are liquid nitrogen (so cold they burn)"
I liked this. I liked the imagery and the fact that you were obviously trying to do something a little different with the style. It works, mostly. After a while, however, there are simply too many brackets. They break the flow of the story and make it slightly difficult to read easily. You might want to go through and double check your fullstops as well - there are a couple are missing.
Overall this was an excellent story. If I was you, I'd leave it as a one-shot - it works best that way.
Thanks for sharing.
| Nomes chapter 1 . 5/11/2008
Very nice, I quiet enjoyed that. It works really well as a stand alone.