|Reviews for A Few Angry Words|
| Irie Iris chapter 25 . 12/26/2013
I was okay with the Sakura bashing up until this chapter. I wholeheartedly agree that she is very, very annoying and useless. But Hinata as Tsunade's apprentice? NO. She does not have Sakura's chakra control and intelligence to advance very highly in medical ninjutsu.
I was fine with Sakura not being Tsunade's apprentice, but taking Hinata, a character that I see you favor clearly, replacing Sakura's role is NOT okay. Not only did you bash Sakura relentlessly (like I said, I'm okay with it but it's a bit too heavy), but you have also raised Hinata on a pedestal that she does not deserve. Hinata is an amazing character but she is not as amazing as you interpret her in your story. All characters have their flaws, and Hinata is turning out to be a common Mary-Sue.
You have your freedom of speech and all that jazz as a writer, but I do not like the choice you have made.
I also want to say that Sasuke is not that big of an idiot. He has his moments when he isn't too cold. I don't think he'd be stupid enough to talk back to the Sandaime too. It's not in his character to speak up like that unless speaking with someone familiar.
I don't get how Kiba could be promoted. He is not nearly powerful enough to be a Chunin. I understand that you did this to introduce the Sound Four into genin squads, but he doesn't deserve it.
That being said, I also want to compliment you on a fine job with the plot. I find myself more intrigued with every chapter. The turn of events astound and surprise me every time.
The creation of Naruto's goal gives us something to look forward to and keep reading. That is awesome.
I like how you have developed Naruto. He is too powerful in my opinion, but it somehow makes sense with your plot.
I loved Lee's death. It completely shook up the plot and changed everything. I love Lee himself, but we must sacrifice him for the plot!
| Maleon chapter 61 . 12/15/2013
Loved it! The only thing I really missed was seeing Neji get his rude awakening for being such a hateful douche for pretty much all his life. XD
| Maleon chapter 44 . 12/15/2013
Actually, unless you make a significant alteration or addition in a later chapter, the physics is entirely correct. Though photons are traditionally considered massless, they do have energy and energy can be equated to mass. From what I've read there's some debate on the subject, since photons can't yet be measured in that manner, but for the purposes of the Hiraishin... genius. ( .edu/home/baez/physics/ParticleAndNuclear/photon_ ).
Also, though many people seem to have disliked the last chapter, even if it was melancholy I found it highly enjoyable and well thought out. My only request, if you get the chance, is that I would absolutely love to see a short, post-inauguration Hiashi-Hiruzen interaction where the Sandaime essentially politely chews the arrogant elitist a new one, over the topics of "right" and "wrong," patriotism, humility, and over reaching, with bonus points for a mention of the result of his arrogance breaking Hinata's heart, and how from her youth she always had a better grasp of such topics than Hiashi ever would.
| SilverRider09 chapter 20 . 12/7/2013
I'm actually kinda close to hating Hinata right now for dating and being cruel, beating Naruto up for thinking about romance at such a young age, and murdering Neji for being a **** and butting into other people's business, as well as dating Tenten at such a young age. Tenten I shall forgive. She is just that awesome. :3
| SilverRider09 chapter 15 . 12/7/2013
HURRAH! HURRAH! OROCHIMARU DIED!
But I kind of feel sorry for him...especially since I just finished watching naruto spin-offs...he got defeated so pathetically...
| SilverRider09 chapter 10 . 12/7/2013
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! HOW DARE YOU! WHY DID GAARA AND LEE HAVE TO DIE?!
| SilverRider09 chapter 9 . 12/7/2013
I feel horribly, horribly sympathetic for ebisu. Oh the humiliation...LOL.
| Hakuna Matata.Kawaii chapter 61 . 12/5/2013
omg! best story ever!
| Hakuna Matata.Kawaii chapter 44 . 12/5/2013
i cried in the last chapter:'( your story is AMAZING!
| ookamilover23 chapter 61 . 12/3/2013
im in tears right now
the was a gorgeous story
thank you so ,much for writing this.
i cant wait till i read another of your storys
| Endgames chapter 61 . 11/24/2013
Man, that's just a bit "awwwww" chapter. This was a good story. The only issue I had with it was that it seemed unlikely that if the Fourth was really trying to teach Jiraiya his technique, you'd think he'd have told him about photons. Not a big deal, but it does seem kind of odd.
I really liked the slow progression of the characters. I liked the adaptation of the seal. I liked that not all the bad guys were dead in the end, so it's not a total "happily ever after," but enough died that it's "happy for now." The relationship between Naruto and Hinata was so cute and innocent. It made me laugh several times. It almost made me cry - once though, only once, I'm still manly. All in all, it was a great story.
| Endgames chapter 43 . 11/23/2013
I understand your reasons for writing this, and it provides a semi-plausible backstory to your previous (Maiden's day) omake. I can't say I enjoyed reading it, but I did like certain parts. I like the consequences to stupid bets. I like that the Hokage shows some deviousness in dealing with a problem. And I like the very real-feeling emotions shown here. It's just too bad that most were painful ones.
| Endgames chapter 40 . 11/23/2013
I think the last two lines in this chapter comprised the single funniest moment in this story. I'm still chuckling a few minutes later.
Interesting twist. I never really liked canon's "Itachi's a good guy. No really, he was under orders the whole time." But I can understand your reasoning for bringing him in if you're accepting canon that way. What I don't quite get is why no one in the council pressed the Hokage for exactly how he managed to locate, pardon, and bring in Itachi so soon after Sasuke's death. I guess they could have assumed that Itachi came on his own. But I'd think that they would be wondering how the Hokage was planning on keeping a ninja of his caliber under control. This would lead to either questioning whether the Hokage was actually under control of Itachi, or if Itachi was ever actually out of control at all. It just seems to be the logical conclusion.
| TheQuasiZillionaire chapter 61 . 11/20/2013
Thank you, good sir. You have provided me with numerous hours of page-turning (page-clicking?) entertainment, and even though I really should have written that essay today, I have enjoyed immersing myself in your worlds. You are easily one of the best authors on this site, and I hope you continue writing for some time.
| a-d Pilot chapter 31 . 11/19/2013
On the matter of Jiraiya's reaction to Supai/Kameko, it seems inconsistent with the one he gave Orrochimaru.
"Much as I hate to admit it yes. So you've discovered a way to turn into a woman which isn't merely henge."