I loved this. You captured everyone so well, even though they all lost their memories. I also loved how you turned McKay into "Hero" and had Sheppard point that out at the end. Even if you admit you struggled writing this, it flowed so well and you wrapped it up nicely.

Nice little tale of madness and lost minds. Well worth the read.

Awesome.

That was awesome! I loved the ending

In my opinion, best three lines :

#1. '"That's because nothing can kill you," Rodney said, as if this fact caused him mild irritation.' lol, so true

#2. 'Bugs!" he said pugnaciously. "You turned into a bug."' lol, beautiful. so McKay.

#3. '"Insight," Rodney said. "Out of the mouths of babes and… and colonels with no memory. I'm a hero. I, my friends, am a hero. He said it."' Oh, so perfect! You really got all the characters spot on, which is hard to do when they lose their memories. Great work!

Understandable you had some difficulty writing this but it turned out great! You did a wonderful job letting the reader recognize the team while showing the differences the Dark brought out. I started reading this just before bed & was so drawn in, couldn't put it down...became quite a late night ;~)

This was very good. You avoided the usual shortcuts writers tend to make, so not your avarage memory loss fic, but one with ralistic reactions and believable charatcters (I too think that they don't necessary have to be their own prototype or whatever when stripped of all memories, the normally "small" personality traits can be very well amplified like it happens in your story). Thnaks for sharing this great fic!

I liked the well-drawn confusion of the team and the different aspects that no longer having behaviour based on experience brought up in them.

Also loved the "Crystalline entity" tag, brilliant touch!

Wow. I must say, I'm extremely impressed. I've always thought it'd be really hard to do a memory loss, but you've just taken hold of this thing and torn it apart-in a very very good way! Your plot was fantastic, very original, and add that to keeping it all together with the amnesia things and such... Kudos, my friend. Amazing. Keep writing!

finish it later today, just wanted to tell you that I do love it really well. Thank you.

WOOT!

Poor John, being attacked by Ronon.

Sai

I absolutely love this story! The role reversal for Sheppard and Rodney were amazing, and Ronon being afraid to shoot people and Teyla wanting to leave them! I always feel like something profound has happened when I read your stories, like maybe I change a little bit along with the characters. :D

Seriously. Brilliant. I mean it.

How hard it must have been to decide how they would have all behaved! The way you brought the characters together, too, based on solid evidence - the guns and uniforms - rather than special 'hunches' was good - not too easy.

Honestly, the real surprises came towards the end for me, as I wasn't thinking at all about how much this would have changed your main characters. I was too caught up in the whole FLY-YOU-FOOLS! of the whole business to think much past their escape. So I was pleasantly surprised to find that you'd included some repercussions in regards to each assumed persona. I saw Rodney's reaction coming a mile away - *you* knew and *I* knew that Rodney's behavior was typical of a leader in a crisis - fake it 'til you make it! - but Rodney of course believes that Sheppard (and all successful leaders) are exactly as confident as they appear. Still, I wasn't expecting Teyla's or Ronon's reactions. The idea of having to forge a new sense of self from nothing, and then hanging on to bits and pieces of that hard-won personality is intriguing. You took a story with distinctly Lovecraftian premise and made it about how the main characters can *grow* and *change*! I am a sap, and I adore this sort of thing. ;)

So basically you terrified me and then soothed me with character development. Therefore: good show,

-K

THIS... this is bloody incredible. I have to protest at the amount of random pronouns - I have to pay very close attention to have any idea whatsoever to whom you are referring, sentence to sentence - but I understand why you didn't give *everyone* a new name right away. It rings false.

However, now that some time has passed, and you've got four men in one room - what does Teyla call Ronon, 'hey, you!'? Presumably they need to communicate effectively and rapidly in such a dangerous situation.

...perhaps the details are slipping, and they all recognize that it wouldn't actually matter, anyway? Poor John, forgetting even the nickname he'd given Rodney.

I adore the juxtaposition of Rodney and John's usual roles - especially because Rodney goes from being a hero by assumption to being a hero based on his actions and the way he takes responsibility for the lives of the others. Good show on making his leadership uncontested by circumstance regarding both Sheppard and Dex - Dex looks irresponsible, and Sheppard unskilled or even too trusting (turning his back on an enemy and getting injured!) Though why they assume Teyla isn't leader is anybody's guess. Perhaps her gender overrules her to John and Rodney? (?)

Enjoying this muchly, and thanks,

-K

This is an awesome story! I think you did really well with characters and even though they were out of character they seemed strangely in character too. It's funny John made all his friends feel better and himself too. This is a really wonderfully written story and you should be proud!

Great story! I love how the characters acted so differently and the thoughts now. It's awesome! You did a really good job at writing this!

Awesome story! I love it!