Reviews for The Days of Wine and Roses
Lindele chapter 1 . 6/17/2008
Very lovely story! Great work! I enjoyed the playful thoughtfulness of it.

A few friendly critiques:

There were a few typos and grammatical mistakes; often reading over a work several times can help avoid these pesks.

To my taste, there was an overuse of the word "indeed".

Also, I would suggest that you work on flow of conversation. It's very difficult, I know, so just keep writing! Practice makes perfect. ]
Virtuella chapter 1 . 6/8/2008
Charming story! A very original idea, and well executed. It is delightful to have the mithril shirt linked to Legolas and to revisit scenes from The Hobbit. I liked the frame, too. But I couldn't find the rose, am I blind?

Typo: "glances at eh time"

Typo: "I you must know": Lost an f there

Typo: "fellow rule": Lost an r.

"do what?" Needs a capital

I have a quick summary of how to punctuate direct speech, would you like to have it?
Elfinabottle chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
I liked it, especially the part about the mithril vest originally belonging to Legolas. Who looked ridiculous in it. LOL
jennie chapter 1 . 5/12/2008
short, sweet, and lovely. i love well-done one-shots like this. kudos!
Sarahbarr17 chapter 1 . 5/12/2008
This is really good, but it would be useful if you included Elvish translations at the bottom of the chapter! Otherwise, well written and very enjoyable!


Sarah x