|Reviews for The Days of Wine and Roses|
| Lindele chapter 1 . 6/17/2008
Very lovely story! Great work! I enjoyed the playful thoughtfulness of it.
A few friendly critiques:
There were a few typos and grammatical mistakes; often reading over a work several times can help avoid these pesks.
To my taste, there was an overuse of the word "indeed".
Also, I would suggest that you work on flow of conversation. It's very difficult, I know, so just keep writing! Practice makes perfect. ]
| Virtuella chapter 1 . 6/8/2008
Charming story! A very original idea, and well executed. It is delightful to have the mithril shirt linked to Legolas and to revisit scenes from The Hobbit. I liked the frame, too. But I couldn't find the rose, am I blind?
Typo: "glances at eh time"
Typo: "I you must know": Lost an f there
Typo: "fellow rule": Lost an r.
"do what?" Needs a capital
I have a quick summary of how to punctuate direct speech, would you like to have it?
| Elfinabottle chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
I liked it, especially the part about the mithril vest originally belonging to Legolas. Who looked ridiculous in it. LOL
| jennie chapter 1 . 5/12/2008
short, sweet, and lovely. i love well-done one-shots like this. kudos!
| Sarahbarr17 chapter 1 . 5/12/2008
This is really good, but it would be useful if you included Elvish translations at the bottom of the chapter! Otherwise, well written and very enjoyable!