|Reviews for Indiana Jones and the Curse of the Scarb Pendent|
| jennigirl chapter 2 . 6/1/2008
I'm going to offer a few suggestions. There are a lot of spelling errors, which are rather distracting. I'd suggest editing your work to catch these mistakes (as there is even one in the summary of your story), or having someone else do it.
It's also moving much too fast. Will was eaten, but you did not give the audience the pleasure of a description of why she was eaten (I hated her, God knows it would have been cathartic to read), and Indy spends remarkably little time mourning for her, considering she's his girlfriend. It seems like you're rushing to get into the "meat" of the story, which I understand, it's the most fun to write, but try to take some time to flesh out the beginning and introduce the characters more. I hope this helps a bit, it's a good idea, take my suggestions and it'll be great. :)
| filmgrl13 chapter 1 . 5/17/2008
Interesting start. Please continue!
| Padma The Q chapter 1 . 5/17/2008
This sounds totally sweet. Please update soon!