Reviews for The Fourth
Ashley chapter 1 . 8/27/2004
Shuffle Queen chapter 1 . 12/9/2003
Aren't they all sisters? If so, wouldn't this qualify as incest? To me, that is nasty beyond belief. Sorry, I read the summary and coulsn't go on.
~Shuffle Queen~
grandfunkrev chapter 1 . 10/9/2001
A good basic plot, I was able to read it on the screen, and you give an explanation. You could add in a little more details though on reactions, etc. Other than that, it was pretty good! Keep writing!
luvuBrad chapter 1 . 10/7/2001
love it! Please do a sequel
Obscuris chapter 1 . 10/7/2001
Hmm. It's not bad. Though maybe you should've given him clothes besides Brick, ya know. Maybe instead of a sweater, it's a short-sleeved shirt. Maybe instead of jeans, it's shorts. Whatever. Just don't make him too much like Brick...or I might mistaken him for Brick, but with a different name, heh :). Anyway, like FBK, space your fic a bit better. Maybe skip lines after a person finishes his/her dialouge and a new speaker speaks.
FBK chapter 1 . 10/6/2001
That was pretty damn good to say the least. I think you should write more, just space the fic a little better.
Mr. BC chapter 1 . 10/6/2001
Not Bad, not bad at all. Do another one if you please.