Reviews for The Hill
Xxdark wolf girlxX chapter 1 . 7/9/2008
amazing i luv it hope u make more story
animefan28 chapter 1 . 5/29/2008
I'm assuming that english is not your first language correct? Because there were so many grammer mistakes, and it took away from the story. But if your not that great at writing English because its your second or maybe third language then you can't help that, so it was a nice effort. I do love the couple though.
hotteybobody chapter 1 . 5/28/2008
hey your story was pretty good. Good use of vocabulary! But i have a question, are you foreign? NO offense, but your grammer could use some work. I'd be willing to help you if you want! :)

Keep working hard,

Fluffy Braided Musume chapter 1 . 5/23/2008
This would be a pretty good fanfiction... WOULD be.

The great effect is destroyed by quite many grammar and sometimes spelling errors. Perhaps you could try to rewrite uncorrect sentences? If you do so, this fic will be perfect
NAMITHAA JAYASANKAR chapter 1 . 5/21/2008
MagnusLR chapter 1 . 5/21/2008
Ata: amazing! sweet and tender! never new they could look so good together!

nice work
RukiaDeathKuchiki chapter 1 . 5/20/2008
well i needed that
LivestoRead chapter 1 . 5/19/2008
Eh... I have to say I didn't enjoy it so much. Mostly because of the numerous spelling/grammar mistakes. I'll volunteer to correct it to the best of my abilities if you like ... xD
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