|Reviews for These Things That Make Us Men|
| Amy chapter 1 . 8/16/2013
Awesome! I love the way Edmund helps him. And the way you changed the writing from harsh to soft in rhythm with Peter's mood is brilliant!
| Misty Blue chapter 1 . 10/14/2012
Oh, well. Now there's definitely no doubt about it: Edmund had just given the key back to the magnificence in Peter... Or should I say, he became the key. Or perhaps he always was, but Peter simply did not really notice before, even though he himself had known it very well from past experiences. Now, the fog that clouded them has finally been lifted, the ice between them at last melted.
And yes, the whole Caspian issue has also been cleared up, and our dear, one and only High King, I believe, now sees the light as well. All thanks to our beloved King Edmund, the Just... and the good, understanding, (and also magnificent in his own way) younger brother.
This is simply an excellent, wonderfully-written, piece! I love it. Thank you for writing this, and keep it up!
| WillowDryad chapter 1 . 11/22/2011
That was wonderful.
| Kamakaze Kheri chapter 1 . 3/21/2011
This was lovely. The bond between Edmund and Peter is always one that I love to read about and you just seemed to capture so many emotions in this story. I was just sort of wondering when this was set during the movie, but it doesn't really matter I suppose :) Great work!
| Desertfyre chapter 1 . 3/15/2011
Beautiful story! D
| ThorinKiliandFili4ever chapter 1 . 10/22/2009
A great story. Very good.
| The Owl's Pen chapter 1 . 3/19/2009
"The tone of his voice from a future in their past." My dear, that sums up the paradox of Narnian time better than anything I have ever read! Amazing, amazing read. I love how you portray the brothers... this is going in my faves right now *grin*
| LunaNigra chapter 1 . 1/18/2009
I love these two!
And your story!
| Rolletti chapter 1 . 11/16/2008
Thank you for such a great read and, in my opinion, true to character. Edmund knew just how to get through Peter, after all it's his brother and fellow king. I am glad to see that you were not afraid to use their bodies as dialog too,very creative. It's obvious it is only brotherly bonding and not an expression of incest. I can personally testify that such sibling love exist. You showed how strong their confidence, love and bond in each other is, and not that seductive trash I see trying to invade a lot of Narnian stories.
Your description of how they felt, whether it was mental or physical was superb. It was as if I was watching the whole thing and experiencing how the characters felt. This for instance gripped me and made me rush on to the next paragraph: "Peter felt a rush of many things as the words processed in his brain: indignation, anger, embarrassment, irritation, defensiveness, and above all these, the sheer and piercing sensation of being completely and utterly called out on the truth. “I what?” He spluttered vacantly, face pale aside from the feverish flush of his cheeks, blessedly masked by the shadow." Wow! I applaud you. Keep up the good work and most of all keep up the confidence you have in your writing, that's what makes you great. You have inspired me to keep trying when I was ready to give it all up. Thanks,
| ValykirieRevolution chapter 1 . 8/16/2008
Aw, I wish this was a real scene. You don't get enough of these; great job
| Francienyc chapter 1 . 7/1/2008
Perhaps I'm a bit of a cheater to check out the other reviews before writing my own, but I wanted to see if what I had to say tallied with what others were thinking. It kind of does. The dialogue in this story is great. It's a wonderful moment between the two brothers, and I like that Edmund has this moment of unflinching honesty. However, their body language seems at odds with that. When you consider what they're doing, and the significance lent to Edmund's arm around Peter's shoulders, it becomes a very seductive scene, particularly, when Edmund has his face tucked into Peter's neck and rubs his nose along the jawline. In the end, I came away confused as to what this fic was supposed to be-a moment between two brothers or a chapter in a love story. Not being the hugest fan of incest I would prefer the former personally, but a slight swing in either direction would make this story stronger (and it is already strong). As it is, it rides the fence a bit too much.
I say all this because I think the concept is great, and the dialogue between the two brothers is very powerful. I definitely enjoyed this story.
| esther chapter 1 . 6/7/2008
dude. wow. freaking wow. you've reduced me to incoherent fangirlishness.
i just saw the movie a couple of days ago, and i was TOTALLY struck squealing mad by edmund jumping in and helping peter fight and like, every other little HINT of the edmund and peter bond and the AWESOMENESS just waiting to be turned into a really fantastic fic.
this was pure reading pleasure. copy and pasted. i'm going to check your profile now in the desperate hope that you've written more. PLEASE PLEASE have written more!
| Siriusly Loopy chapter 1 . 6/4/2008
Edmund's ALWAYS been wise. It just... hid for a while. :)
| Fin of Land chapter 1 . 6/3/2008
Oh . . . Wow. This was amazing. It flowed together so perfectly and never missed a beat. It started from the beginning and came back full circle to the beginning in a very smooth way.
I loved it!
| uselessmushroom chapter 1 . 5/26/2008
great story good use of brotherly love/bonding.