|Reviews for A Small Piece|
| xmiemiex chapter 1 . 10/25/2008
| Evynn chapter 1 . 6/17/2008
I love jelsi so much that so perfect!
| Ris Fallon chapter 1 . 5/30/2008
Yes, I felt the need to announce myself. Rar. x3
Anyways, to business!
It was pretty good
I thought it was adorable
And the lyrics separated the time line nicely
But there are a few times where
You kinda either used the wrong word
Or your spelling was a bit mixed up.
I know at one point you wrote "blond" instead of "blood"
Maybe you should try find a grammar checker online?
Or send it to me before posting it :P
It just needs a small fine-tuning
No drastic anything, the story was beautiful
| AllForLoveAndHappiness chapter 1 . 5/25/2008
aw this is so cute! i love it u should like do a sequal of them like when they get married and have kids! ilove it !