|Reviews for Breaking Free|
| acetwolf94 chapter 16 . 2/2
I LOVE IT! ADD MORE!
| Mika the Dark princess chapter 16 . 7/28/2012
| ShezzaBoo0233 chapter 16 . 6/16/2012
you have such an amazing story going on here :) so i do hope that you will plan to finish it soon! Goodluck with the rest of the story :) xxLM0233
| Fleur24 chapter 13 . 4/20/2012
""Wait for me!" We heard Emmett yell from upstairs. The next second he was in front of us, leaning his elbows on the bench. "So?" He asked, "What's going on with Alice?" I had to stifle a laugh. He sounded just like a gossiping preteen girl."" That is funny!
I think Alice and Micheal are mates.
"""I think well are all forgetting the most important thing here." Emmett interrupted, "She spent the whole time in the lounge giving that Ben guy her bedroom eyes."
"They weren't… Oh, my god, they were her bedroom eyes!" Jasper realised.
"You children gossip way too much." Esme said as she walked in.
"You want to know just as much as we do Esme." Rosalie said, "Plus Emmett's the worst one." She smiled at him and Emmett poked his tongue out at her."" That's just funny!
Movie time! Memories for Jasper and Bella!
| Fleur24 chapter 12 . 4/20/2012
So Emmett knows about their little makeout session. He'd better not tell anyone until Bella's ready.
""We went flying, and it wasn't until a few seconds after I heard the crunch that I realised we had gone straight through Esme's front door.
"Boys, what have you broken now" I heard Esme calling from the kitchen.
"Nothing" We replied in sync, but I could hear her footsteps coming towards us, so we knew we were in trouble."" Why does that reply not surprise me. Boys *rolls eyes*
HAHA yea no one wants to be faced with an angry Esme.
So pretty much everyone but Edward knows about Jasper and Bella.
Edward didn't love Bella like she loved him, she was his china doll, his possession.
| Fleur24 chapter 11 . 4/20/2012
""Alice told us about you two but don't worry, as soon as we get Eddie laid, we will work on you too."
This time both Edward and Rosalie hit him over the head."" HAHA that's funny.
Edward will hopefully be the one needing a mate.
Good Edward and Bella are going to talk.
"""I'm glad. I know you sometime feel you are only hear for Alice, but know that you are as much my son as Edward or Emmett."
"Thanks mum" I told her. It didn't seem adequate for how I felt at her statement."' Jasper is just as much a part of the family as Alice.
"'"I may not be able to read mind, but I can read my son's eyes. Feeling the worlds emotions must have a huge effect on you, but I can always see your emotions, and yours alone through your eyes." She told me.
I pulled her into a big hug. I had realised this along time ago, but I didn't think anyone else had. Alice sure hadn't and I was touched that Esme had."" AWE! I LOVE Esme!
Esme and her knowing smile. Does that mean she already knows about Jasper and Bella?
Bella is sweet, sometimes too much for her own good.
So Bella did break it off with Edward. I'm glad she did.
I LOVe how Rosalie talked with Bella and told her how proud she was of Bella ending it with Edward.
""saw Rose on the receiving end of a huge hug from Bella.
The sight brought a smile to my face, as they were practically sisters. It was nice to see them bond.
Rose must have sensed me, because she turned and gave me a small smile."" AWE! I think Rosalie and BElla might start to like each other.
"""We better still see a lot of you after this, we like you more then Edward anyway."
We all laughed, and Bella went upstairs to get ready for bed."' HAHA that is so true!
I'm glad that Rosalie has begun to like Bella for who she is and not who Edward thinks she is .
| Fleur24 chapter 10 . 4/20/2012
""In the end I decided I should just talk to Bella, hoping she would put my fears to rest."' Good for you Jasper. Talking to Bella about your feelings and fears in the best thing to do.
YAY Bella and Jasper feel the same way about each other.
""I saw the corners of his mouth start to turn up, and the next ting I knew, his lips were pressed against mine.
There was no lead up, no hesitation, he just…kissed me. It took a while for my brain to realise it should react, but as soon as a started to more my lips in sync with his, I heard a slight purring coming from his chest. He responded immediately by wrapping his cold, muscled arms around me and pulling me closer. I tangled my fingers in his hair, and marvelled at just how right it felt."" I really like this part.
I agree that Bella should sort thing s out with Edward, before she goes any father with Jasper.
""We lay in silence for hours, Jazzy playing with my hair, and myself tracing his chest and arm muscles through his shirt."" I LOVE this! Its so sweet!
""So before we fill you in, I have to ask, what on earth were you doing in the woods all day, do you know what is out there?" Edward asked me.
I was shocked that he would bring this up in front of his whole family, before I had even had a chance to say hello to them yet.
"I was with Jasper, and I go in to the woods all the time with you all the time." I replied softly embarrassed at this callousness.
"But I am there to protect you then. I want you to promise me you will never go in to the woods with out me aga-"" This is why Edward pisses me off and makes me want to kill him.
"'He was cut of by Rosalie of all people.
"Oh get over it Edward, she is a grown woman, she can do what she likes."
The room fell into a tense silence after that. I gave her a grateful but timid smiled, and was please to see her return it."" Hurray for Rosalie!
AWE Jasper made her a smoothie!
| Fleur24 chapter 9 . 4/20/2012
""How about if I sing too, only I get to chose my own song." He tried to sweeten the deal.
"Oh please, please, please Bella, Jasper never sings in public." Alice added.
"Fine, but it had better be a reasonable song, and you two are going first." I agreed, because I knew I would give in eventually, and hopefully this way it would be over sooner. Also Alice had me wanting to hear Jasper sing, I knew he played guitar, but had never actually heard him play."" SWEET Jasper's going to sing!
I think Jasper has deffinitly fallen for Bella.
"""Well Alice, your first. What will she be singing Bella?" I asked. I could see the wheels turning in her head as she though about tried to think of the best way to embarrass Alice.
"Soulja Boy! And I wanna see you do the Soulja Boy dance too." She smirked at Alice.
I laughed quietly to myself, wondering if Bella knew the secret meaning behind the song. I knew Alice didn't, and I had no intention of telling her. Why ruin Bella's fun?"" HAHA Alice doesn't know the secret meaning behind the song. I think its funny that Bella wants to embarrass Alice a little.
""It was hilarious feeling the amusement and shock coming from the audience as they watched this stunningly beautiful woman trying to rap.
Bella loved the performance; she was in stitches the whole time. The first time that Alice did the dance, I had to calm her down just so that she could breath.
She finally stepped down from the stage, sending Bella daggers the whole time. She had a slight smile on her face though, so I could tell se wasn't too upset."" That's really funny. I can't Alice rapping.
AWE Jasper picked out a song just for Bella.
"" Alice was staring at me with a knowing smile, I was pretty sure she knew what was going, but to my surprise she didn't seem to mind. She had developed into my little sister a while ago, and we both knew it."" Well I'm glad that Alice is okay with Jasper being love with Bella.
Hmph, Edward's not the only musical genius in the family.
Bella's song does suit her very well.
| Fleur24 chapter 8 . 4/20/2012
""Getting to know him has made me see what an amazing person/vampire he really was. He was the one person here who could truly understand me. I had always thought Edward and Alice could, but the more time I spend with Jasper, the more I have started to see that they saw what they wanted to see, and just assumed the rest. Jasper really listened to me, like Edward used to when we first met."" Interesting. I do like Jasper a whole more than I like Edward. Jasper does seem the better choice, as he treats her as an equal, whereas Edward treats her like a china doll.
""I'm sorry, I couldn't help it. Trust me, if you could see yourself, you would see my point."
He didn't answer; he just looked at his feet. I felt so bad, he was just trying to cook me breakfast.
"Aww, Jazz, I am sorry, I really appreciate you trying to cook. Really, I do.
He perked up as soon as I said Jazz, and I felt a bit better for laughing at him."" AWE Jasper tried to make her breakfast! that is so SWEET!
"'"Oh my God! That has to be one of the most amazing things I have ever tasted." I answered as soon as I got my voice back.
"Me, or the smoothie?" He asked. I threw the towel at him, refusing to answer and grabbed another to start cleaning."" That's funny!
""Once everything was locked into place we both reached for the switch. I felt my warm fingers touch his cold one, and a jolt of electricity surged through my hand."" Ooooooooo This is good!
Jasper just loves doing things like that to Bella.
""Haven't you learnt by now? I'm a big fan of surprises"
"Haven't you leant by now? I'm not!"
He laughed at my response,"" HAHA That is funny!
"""I tried calling you earlier, why didn't you answer?" His irritated voice came over the line. This bugged me, not even a hello for your fiancé?
"My phone was set to vibrate, I didn't realise you were calling." I answered curtly."" Poor Bella. I don't like the new Edward, either.
I'm glad that Bella stood up for Jasper. He's not a weak link like Edward thinks he is.
I'm glad that BElla told jasper all about her recent problems. I LOVe how how Jasper listened to her and let her get it off her chest. He's awesome like that.
| Fleur24 chapter 7 . 4/20/2012
""EMMETT! You changed my ring tone again!" I bellowed at him.
"Damn, I was hoping you had forgotten. Well, I think I smell I bear, gotta run!" He took off at vampire speed. I could have caught him, but I decided to get him later, it was more fun letting him run around scared."" That is more fun than chasing him.
Awe Edward's sad that Bella got off the phone quicker than usual.
""Bout time Bells, I have the music from the DVD menu memorised, and it is driving me nuts." Jasper sent a death glare to the TV and I had to laugh."" HAHA that's funny!
"""I made popcorn for Bella, just let me grab it." She bounced from the room leaving furious looking Jasper.
I couldn't help but laugh and he turned to look at me.
"You wouldn't be laughing if you had heard the same loop for the last twenty minutes."" Poor Jasper is being tortured by the DVD menu music.
AWE Jasper and Bella are getting cozy!
| Fleur24 chapter 6 . 4/20/2012
I don't think they should tell Edward. He doesn't need to know everything that Bella does. That's just creepy and way over the line for protectiveness.
""Rose is so pissed off I bought it first, it has only just been released, and is so much better then her crappy M3." I told her as we climbed in, happy to brag about my car at any point, the black convertible was my pride and joy.
"I'm glad I wasn't here when she found out you bought it" Bella said, feeling slightly scared from, I imagine, picturing Rosalie's tantrum.
"Yeah, it was pretty bad, but totally worth it." I winced slightly, remembering her mood swings for weeks, just to annoy me."" That's really funny!
HAHA Jasper kissed Emmett!
""I noticed Bella's feeling of fear and unease, and noticed her looking at the speedo, so I slowed down to just above the speed limit. I wanted her to enjoy herself, not spend the whole time hoping she would survive.
"Jasper, what going on. Why are we going so slow?" Alice whinged.
"You know how Bella feels about speeding Alice, live with it." I told her. Bella blushed, but shot me a grateful smile."" I LOVE how Jasper is very thoughtful about Bella's feelings like that.
They are going paintballing. I knew it!
""Paintballing, you're taking me paintballing? I have always wanted to try it ever since I saw Ten Things I Hate About You! This is gonna be so much fun!" She exclaimed."" HAHA Bella doesn't need any convincing!
Its good that Jasper and Alice went at human speed and didn't sniff each other out.
""I backed in to something rock hard.
I screamed in shock and spun to see what it was. The first thing I saw was a paintball gun so I screamed even louder and open fired with my eyes close.
Suddenly I realised I wasn't the only one screaming.
"Alice?" I asked finally opening my eyes and seeing my teammate standing there mirroring my pose with her eyes closed.
"Bella?" She asked, peeking through one eye. She realised it was me and threw her arms around me."" That's funny.
Jasper probably just folloed the screaming.
""Here's the plan, I will call out the we are out of ammo and tell him to meet us in the middle of the field, we will walk to wards him looking defeated, and as soon as he is past any barriers he could hide behind, you raise you gun and shot him" She sounded like a battle sergeant with the plan. I guess living with Jasper was bound to rub off a bit."" I bet it does rubb off a bit.
""I already saw our counting, and we beat you by one shot. Nice work Bella!" Alice gave me a high five and we went back to our celebrating. Its not everyday you beat an army man like Jasper in a game like this.
He grumbled and complained but eventually he admitted defeat."" HAHA Jasper didn't like being beaten, but what man does like being beaten by a girl at anything?
| Fleur24 chapter 5 . 4/20/2012
Hmmmmmmmm Jasper as a hippie. He could probably pull it off with his shaggy hair and empathy.
""She caught my eye, and she started pulling faces behind Alice's back. I smiled, and then struggled to hold back a laugh as she started imitating Alice's hand gestures.
Both our smiles ceased when Alice spun on the spot to face her,
"Just because I am not facing you, doesn't mean I can't see you." She reminded Bella, though she had a smile on her face as she said it so I knew she wasn't too mad.
I sent a wave of calm to Bella, and a wave of amusement to Alice and soon they were both laughing over the whole situation."" This was probably my favorite part!
""She only has so long left as a human, and she is wasting it picking out her favourite shade of silver. It didn't seem fair.
With not long left until the wedding. I told my self I should do all I can for my new friend and soon to be sister, to make sure her last days as a human were well spent."" I agree with Jasper. I LOVE Alice, but she can get abit out of hand.
| Fleur24 chapter 4 . 4/20/2012
""I walked into the lounge, and immediately saw Alice curled up in a ball on the sofa.
"Oh Alice, we're so sorry" I exclaimed when I saw what a mess she was. I hadn't seen her like this since she guilt-tripped me into letting her plan the wedding.
She turned away from me, with the same puppy dog pout on her face.
"We really are sorry love, its just neither of us could take much more shopping" Jasper quickly jumped to her side, wrapping his arm around her shoulders."" AWE Poor Alice!
HAHA Alice wants to go cable wakeboarding with them.
Uh oh Alice got rid of all their clothes and got them new ones.
Jasper doesn't need a new image. I like his cowboyness.
| Fleur24 chapter 3 . 4/20/2012
What on earth is Cable Wakeboarding? Why does that sound like something Emmett would do even from the title?
Yep Jasper's awesome!
""I came up to the corner and was thrown into the water hard. I came up to spluttering and saw an empty cable go past. I smiled to myself, knowing Jasper missed one. The next cable went past and Jasper sailed by poking his tongue out at me. He got distracted though and fell of a bout twelve feet from me. I laughed out loud, seeing him come out of the water, with his wet hair sticking up everywhere."" That's so funny!
I'm glad that Bella's having fun!
""I loved not being the one always falling and being clumsy. When I was on the water I felt almost as graceful as a vampire."" That is a nice feeling.
AWE Jasper's going to protect Bella against Alice's wrath.
| Fleur24 chapter 2 . 4/20/2012
""Jaspers thoughts interrupted my own,
"She's his girlfriend, not his little sister. What's with the kiss on the head?"" Jasper sounds a little jealous of Edward.
""I saw Jasper giving me a strange look, and I knew my emotions were confusing. He raised one eyebrow at me and I gave a small, 'it's a long storey' look back.
Much to my relief he didn't push it."" That's why Jasper's awesome. He doesn't need to know everything like Edward does.
""asper and I dragging our feet behind her. Just as she walked in Jasper grabbed my hand,
"Quick, lets make run for it!" I knew we had seconds to act, so I squeezed his hand and ran for the exit."" HAHA Let the fun adventures begin!